Is Your Character a Mary Sue? | Comments

i got 27%, i blame the way i made sirens work in my story.they have strange eyes that are seperated in two, and change from siren form to human form a lot. they're kiinda hated by everyone because they're seen as a big danger and are meant to be killed on sight, or turned into the police to be executed. i also put being a siren as disease for her, because thats exactly how she views it, a curse that she was given by another person at a young age. i wasnt sure if she would get high or low, because she is decently powerful and has a depressing backstory, but her main flaws all come in through her personality, she constantly puts down herself, not motivated to do anything, and she ends up being mean to the people she cares the most about. she's unstable and thinks she's a burden on her friends (not her family because she left them cause they're just kinda s---ty people).

I got 23% and honestly suspected I would get more. My OC, Ren Saito, is an oc from My Hero Academia. Her quirks (she has two which I thought would be a key factor in her mary-sue-ness) are healing (though she can only send temporary painkillers to herself and can't take away the pain for others) and mind reading (if she uses it two or more people at once or use it over an extended period she gets a headache). I made her main love interest(s) Katsuki Bakugo and Hitoshi Shinso which I also worried about - y'all gonna come for me lol.

Her father was quirkless and despised heroes, while her mother could heal others and send long-lasting painkillers to the patient. However, her mother nearly died whist trying to save an innocent bystander from harm and her father protected her, breaking his leg beyond repair. At this time Ren's healing power had manifested and her mother was in a mental hospital for the time being. Ren's dad just got out of hospital and she did something stupid.

Ren attempted to heal her father's leg, but got distracted by an on-coming sneeze. Instead of healing her father, she ended up (slight gore warning) ripping out his shin entirely and then sending it straight back down into his thigh. As he bled out, all she could do was sit and watch.

He died at precisely 6:13 on Monday.

And that is the tragic backstory of Ren Saito! There are a lot of plot holes to fill in, like: "Who was taking care of Ren?" and "Why was her mother traumatised?"

Honestly I just needed her mother out of the picture for at least an hour so Ren could accidentally kill her father. Wow, that's dark.

Alright, so I took this quiz for my Detroit Become Human fan character, an AP700 android called Lina. I got 15%, which Im not sure is accurate, although it could be.

Pretty much she worked in situation similar to Markus, where she worked for a rich human who treated as part of the family. She was named by his daughter, who named Lina after her mom, Carolina. Lina had to take care of the girl, a 7 year old whos name is Carla. She also had to clean the house for them, make their food, all the regular duties of her model. But she saw on the news what was going on outside, androids getting rounded up and sent to camps. She became a devient as a cause of it, and left that same night without telling anyone. She tried to find her way to Jericho. She almost got killed in the streets by some drunken idiots who blamed androids for everything, barely getting away in time. She was injured, and found help at Jericho. However, Lina did have to escape, like everyone else, when Jericho was attacked by the FBI. She got severely injured, getting shot at by guards. Luckily the bullets didnt hit any bio components. She ran back to her family, who had been searching for her, trying to tell themselves that she wasnt dead. They found her huddled in an alleyway near their house, and managed to patch her up before any damage could be done from the cold.

Honestly 15% is probably not enough, but I genuinely dont know

got a 40 percent

she is a demon slayer fanfic character she is a daughter of the main villain and hates the fact that her mother was very naives because that had resulted into her mother's death she basically is there to help tanjiro complet some of the missions they go on together but has many flaws and is pretty forgetful her hair is white and she has a gold eye from her mom and red from her dad.

her mom is a high ranked mage so there was some inheritance of her mothers power and because she is the daughter of the main villain she also inherited some demonic abilities

does anyone thing she is overpowered because I really don't know

also sorry about no grammer

I did the quiz four times for my four favorite OC's.

First my beloved Caroline (16%, not bad),

Second Kathryn (16% too, this one kinda surprised me because yeah I understand she has a LOT of flaws but she is too overpowered too),

Max (24% I kinda expected that. She is king Fil's daughter and has some Mary Sue characteritics. But she is a good person:D),

Fil (35%, I admit it... I expected more XD. Ok I like this OC, but I hate his attitude and his powers. He's too powerful and too arrogant! Yeah he is inteligent and more but I can't stand this man. He is based in a Gary stu that one of my school friends did so that's why I expected more percentage.)

A Well done quiz sorry If My comment is too long. Bye have a good day

19 percent, not bad! I'm looking into adding more flaws to my character eventually, but I absolutely adore her so it's hard. ;w;

My character's name is Mochi, she's short and honestly isn't that intimidating but can kill a character if she gets a good chance. She's witty and doesn't think about the consequences of her actions, even if it could possibly hurt her. She gets into lots of fights due to this. She often loses due to not having a strategy or just clawing at them until they die :D (She's a cat person/neko) She's very edgy and introverted, though very loving when you get to know her. Anyone she loves she automatically claims as her own and gets a bit jealous when they hang out with someone else. She has brown hair with a blue highlight/strip in her hair, and blue eyes. I often rotate between different stories and personalities for her, but this is the most recent one.

I used Lin she got 11 I thought it was more because of how she has powers and color changing eyes.....

I did this quiz with my first oc spider spartan got 15% huh

Fifteen percent huh, well then.

My character is an angel-human hybrid. Whos extremely selfish and cruel but but everyone likes her anyway because shes pretty. She dresses very slutty and has had many boyfriends previously. Shes a feminine bad girl in a sense. Her hair is reddish and is brown set up in two ponytails and bangs. As a child, she got raised by her sister because her parents died in a car crash. And her sister really didnt care about her, which is why she is the way she is. Shes about seventeen years old and lives with her best friends. Shes basically a bully but she usually harm the victim more mentally than physically

12%! I think thats good for a character made in 3 days and since a lot of others are imma put her description to get advice

My characters name is Daniela shes five adopted by a gay couple despite shes still quite an ignorant girl she has adhd like in many other cases her classmates think her outbursts due to said mental illness are often her trying to be rude and disruptive she has ginger hair green eyes and pale skin and often an optimistic child not meaning to offend but regularly blunt causing More dislike from her classmates but even so she has about 10 friends 4 in her class as well

I got 19%. I can see why, I havent worked on her for that long. So Im just gonna put her description below and you can tell me how I can improve.

This character is named Kath and shes my version of a siren. Shes a young adult, around 20-23 and she works for the villain in my story. She would often be sent on missions to capture targets for interrogation. She has been working for the villain for a long time and she never thought about whether or not she was happy with doing so. She just did what he said and never gave a second thought. The protagonist ends up saying something that causes Kath to become conflicted. She wonders if working for the villain was what she really wanted and she ends up doing a sloppy job with her missions. She helps the protagonist in the end.

She has light, blue skin and long, red hair. Shes a little on the skinny side but its because sirens are born slim enough to swim through water at top speed. She likes to make mischief but she lacks self-awareness and is unable to read the room and realise when shes going too far.

Because shes a siren, her voice has power over other people. It cant control anyone, its more like this: you know how when a song comes on that you really like and you just want to sit there and listen to it and not do anything else? Her singing is like that. She uses it as a distraction when shes out on missions but she needs to give her voice frequent breaks because it puts a lot of strain on the vocal cords.

Huh 12%! Pretty good for an otherworldly demon I say.

15%

Well, that's better than I expected, to be honest, even if I did work very hard on this kid.

My OC is a sixteen-year-old boy named Rayven, yeah, I know, sounds cliche and like everything else, I'll admit, when I got the idea for him I didn't hardly know ANYTHING.

Rayven's mother owns and teaches a dojo, and as such he is superb in that area.

His story begins after a doctor's appointment, Rayven's got some extreme mental problems, and these come up later.

As he likes to hike, he goes on one, and stumbles across a book. Yeah, a book, it's a magical book, but he doesn't know that.

His blood is spilled across the pages, and with a jerk, he's transported to a new world.

Because I was only 12 when I made this world, it's called Fallfay, and now I'm too attached to the name to change it.

Obviously, he's freaked the heck out, but he's found by a elven girl named Airlia.

Wait, elven?

Well now, this world is WAY different from what he expected, if he had been expecting to be transported to a magical world at all (he wasn't).

After two months with her family, he finally decides he has to get back to his mother, and his little sister Rosie, knowing they'd probably be better off without him but not really caring.

The girl, Airlia, goes with him when he finally gets up enough courage to seek out the three magical pendants, that, if combined, will create a portal back to his own world, along the way, they meet another elf, a boy named Soren, and the three of them become a wonderful team.

However, not all is as it seems, (obviously) and Rayven comes to realize that although he had no meaning to, he made it all about himself. But he also comes to realize that the new, beautiful world where he actually feels he belongs to, is harboring a dark threat.

The tyrant King Madro is twice his match, and the three friends soon come to realize that not all evil can be conquered.

So I got 23% for both of my characters. One of them I think is kinda Mary Sue and I'm working on that. So here they are: Mim is an orphan who lives with her aunt and cousin. She's a petite little thing due to her family trying to lie low and stay off the radar, so she never really gets a chance to get super healthy foods. Now onto her story: in a world where witches are brutally murdered, poor little Mim must keep her powers a secret from the government. She entertains herself by writing and never really learns to use her powers (she learns how to heal and create, but that's it. She learns how to create small barriers later but that's about it). Her aunt goes missing one night while looking for medicine for the cousin, whom had fallen ill. Mim is left with no other choice than try to care for the cousin. The cousin kills himself, leaving Mim to fend for herself. She flees with only two possessions; a wand and a Sunflower she found in her aunt's study. She meets a solider from the army called Thalia, whom produces pink fire and absolutely hates everything. They team up when Thalia finds out that Mim is a witch, assuming she's really powerful. Mim's personality is super quiet and she just kinda sits and waits before taking action. The girls meet Prince Vesper, whom has run away due to not wanting to run the kingdom upon his mother's murder. Vesper doesn't like either of them, but Thalia literally kidnaps him because she was one of the royal guards and swore to protect him, meaning that Vesper could just kill her if he wanted to. Well, Vesper eventually starts to warm up, as does Mim, she becomes extremely naive and likeable. Vesper is like an older brother to her and they all become some sort of misfit sibling family. Vesper eventually tells them that he can talk to ghosts and two ghosts in particular, Jazzy and Bronwyn, have been stalking the trio. Bronwyn is very psychotic and just really doesn't like Mim. There's a whole bunch more but I have to get onto the second

I got 31 percent and I agree somewhat, my character is a goddess who is very powerful but is rarely seen and when she does appear she is a force to be taken seriously. But she also has flaws mainly to do with outliving all the people she met and made memories with. Im really having trouble with her due to the fact that I want her to seem like a force that is not to our understanding but still appealing to the audience.

I got 22% with Tsukiya, my Dangangronpa oc. TBH his past isn't to bad. Grew up with his Mother who taught him herbs and witchcraft (specificity Wiccan). He was excepted into Hopes Peak Academy as the Ultimate Witch. I am still working on his time at hopes peak before the killing game as that is part of a role play. He got hit on by one dude (he is aro and ace). He made a friend, Daichi, who stayed his main friend. At night in the dorms he stayed up late studing herbs and magick (yes that is spelled correctly) until dawn. We have yet to start the killing game but he is a survivor (mainly because Daichi is killed so I want to play as someone for the rest of the roleplay).

Any way to improve him is greatly appreciated

23% Mary Sue. I get it though. My OC is a total Yandere and nobody likes her, she was abandoned by her parents at a very young age until a recently married couple took her in. On her first day of school, she dropped her pencil pouch and it spilled down the stairs. Everyone in the area laughed at her other than her senpai. He went down the stairs to help her pick up her pencils, and as both of them stood up, they clashed their heads together. Both of them had a small bump on their heads but they toughed it out. Ever since then, my OC has been going around murdering anyone who steps between their love or poses some sort of threat. She has a very low sanity level and people at her school are starting to think she's going insane and she should be expelled, but nobody knows that she's the one behind the murders.

I have 40% which makes sense because my character is kinda has mental issues and had a tragic past and stuff and their name is Ash and is a skeleton in undertale and is sans and papyrus sibling UwU I been having her for 2 years.

Aight, I got pretty offended by you calling retarded a disability.

Thats kinda disrespectful ya know? For someone who has things that could be in that group.

And also, one or more of those questions were not about my character, but about my relationship to that character-

Oof.