Is Your Character a Mary Sue? | Comments

eh i dont mind colby being 24% but i answered no on almost all of them but i digress

17% Mary Sue- thought it would be worse

His name is Max Evens, it starts out with him in grade 9, normal looking kid, blond hair, blue eyes, many freckles(dont take that statement lightly) He has a high interest in the arts. music, drama, dance are his main focuses.

I wouldnt consider his back story tragic, his parents are divorced as are over 50% of American parents. Max lives with his John his dad and his sister Rebecca who is 2 years older then him. He and his sister visit their mom once a week one Wednesday.

In the summer of his grade 9 year, Max decides that he needs a change so the classic cutting of the hair. Little back story about this, his girlfriend Nicole, now ex. Told him he was bland and boring. So he as it suggests he became the opposite of bland and boring. No yes this could be viewed as negative, the character changing him self just because someone said so. Now yes it did start out like that but he actually enjoyed the person he was becoming, he was braking out of his shell in a way.

Btw, the style he chose was punk, Mohawk, leather jacket, the whole shabang

Idk, always thought he seemed like a Mary Sue. But as long as your character has flaws and some normality to them they wont be to Mary Sue. If you struggle with things like this, look at people you know, look at their flaws and back storys, it will give it more realism.

22% Mary Sue- not so bad I guess

I mean my character does have a tragic past but the reason is because of the government being very corrupt. In short, a girl named Rayne goes through boarding school until she fed up and goes crazy. The governments plan is to have everyone and I mean EVERY SINGLE SOUL IN THE WORLD on board with their ideas, if not theyll be executed. Many others across the globe, like Rayne, also go madhatter over the pressure thats being forced upon them. Meanwhile, Rayne gets so crazy she murders her parents because they trusted the government was good and their only true religion. The reason why I made up this world story arc is so I can prove how manipulating the rulers of the world can be. I also put in lessons through Raynes eating disorder and other mental illnesses that can form overtime through pressure. Another lesson is from Rayne in this quote, I dont cry because I regretting what I did. Im accepting it. You should too. Then again dont cry too much its annoying.

I got 15% and honestly, I thought it would be waaaay more.

I'm writing a story about four boys at a boarding school in 1978, just trying to get by. I decided to go with my favorite character (don't tell the other three) to see if I needed to spruce him up a little.

His name is Hermann Shoemaker. Hermann was diagnosed with Multiple Sclerosis when he was five, and he has gone through many surgeries, and many canes, crutches, and wheelchairs. His parents are middle class, his alcoholic father who he never saw and his mother who was holding onto the marriage because her catholic upbringing has told her to.

He has dark brown hair with sideburns, that is literally ALWAYS in cowlicks because he literally doesn't care at all. His ears are big and stick out,and his nose is hooked and beak-shaped. He's human, 16 years old (but he acts and dresses like he's 70), and speaks in "The Queen's English" (A more posh and refined English accent). He has insomnia and OCD, and he's all about numbers and patterns

Hermann is the type of guy that wears hand-me-down sweater vests and blazers to class, and because of his back disease, his cane gives him a proper, upright poster. He's stuffy and uptight, hates talking about himself in anyway shape-or-form. He loves math with a passion, and it calms his when he is stressed.

Hermann has a crush on one of his three friends, Theodore (Theo) Ace. Yeah, Hermann is gay whatcha gonna do about it. Anyway, Theo has Tourette's, and because Theo has literal DISGUSTING parents that never gave him the proper care he needed, Hermann prioritized on making Theo feel safe and comfortable when he is having lots of tics. Slowly, Theo began to trust Hermann and honestly, I've found myself kinda making them flirt with each other (or at least try to, because they're both social awkward dorks)

Is there any changing I need to do with Herm? Let me know please!

I got 8% but I think it would be more. I dont know what to call them yet but theyre a Reverse-sona in a cyberpunk-ish setting.

Basically they live with my own persona, named Kittu. Kittus a full-time writer, Reverse sona (lets call them Doggu) is an extremely famous pop star. But hes also a part-time assassin.

Doggu isnt necessarily extremely evil but he is selfish, hes more so true neutral if anything. Sometimes hes bad, sometimes hes good, hes just looking out for himself and Kittu.

Hes charming, attractive, and is amazing at singing. And hoo boy does he get the ladies..and men. Hes pansexual but that isnt the most important to his story.

Basically he was, quite literally made for the use of pop. He was created in a lab, but he wasnt a natural good singer and was forced to work on his talent, even if he didnt want to. Hes an android and even with his charm, he still has a hard time processing them.

Thats extremely prevalent with Kittu, who has high functioning autism and depression. While Kittu does tend to drop signs of his stress, Doggu doesnt usually pick up on them.

My character's name is Alice(Phoenix) she has orange eyes and fire powers and the other characters have powers and eyes that match that power. Her best friend(Frostbite) has a crush on her she does not have interest(He is friend-zoned) One team member betrays them takes control of Phoenix and kills Frostbite because he was trying to KILL a villain and Frostbite caught him in the act. And Phoenix goes into depression you can see this on my youtube channel (Ariel Wier) she got 14%

Right. So, my character is a petty sadsack that compensates for a childhood of isolation by being so overly dramatic and attention seeking it causes humongous inconveniences for everyone else; amongst her hobbies includes swindling money, hoarding data and emotionally manipulating others.

She's also a humongous coward with a cruel streak a mile wide, and revels in the idea of shoving the blame onto someone else. She's quick witted, outwardly charming, but lacks any meaningful connections because of an inability to realistically sympathize with others.

16%. Not bad.

Anyways. This test is more about whether the character is overbloated with information and less about whether they are a Mary Sue. None of these aspects, individually, are actively terrible - the problem only comes when an author tries to shove so many of them into a single vessel that the reader becomes disorientated with what themes the character is supposed to represent.

And some of the questions are just petty. "Is your character overweight?" "Do they have a disability?" "Does your character have purple eyes?"

Really. Treating these things are inherently good / bad in terms of character design is ridiculous, since they are all physical features that have nothing to do with the character's personality. If Harry Potter was an overweight, schizophrenic dweeb with purple eyes he'd still be the same mean spirited b------, but he wouldn't be a Mary Sue. Inversely, if you put the qualities on, say, anyone from Twilight, yes! They would be Mary Sues, because Twilight is written with the English capabilities of a bobcat s---ting on a discarded typewriter.

So in short, this quiz isn't an accurate representation of what a Mary Sue is - some questions have their merit - but the things the quizmaker labels as "Good" or "Bad" don't actually have any impactual weight on a character as a whole.

Tl;DR: This is not a Mary Sue Quiz. It is a "Is your character overbloated with conflicting themes + Ideas, Quiz.

I posted a comment earlier about my character Squirrel (my babyyy) but Id like to comment again about my Warriors oc Mousetail. I got 23% again! Listen its great and all, but this quiz assumes a lot that our character is human. Yes the rules bend for her, she is a queen-but she has no kits and she hangs out in the nursery Ferncloud did that, Daisy did that, why not Mousetail? She only wanted to hang out there because she wanted to help new queens with their first litter after hers died before she came to the clans. Also, again, the quiz uses the r slur and slurs are not good

I did this on my villain character Squirrel, a tall brown cat, with slightly darker stripes. I always thought of his voice/personality based off of the character Toffee from Star Vs the Forces of Evil . I am nothing like Squirrel-yet he got a 23% (which is quite a popular percentage) I am not an anthropomorphic brown cat, note do I wear pullover gray sweaters with white collars, nor am I a male, nor am I responsible for a loved ones death. Squirrel is very witty and calm, I am very dumb and chaotic.

Also this quiz used the r slur, you know, the one used to make fun of and harass people with autism. I know they dont mean any harm with it, but they really shouldnt have used it anyways.

13% for Skulla, the one about everyone wanting to have sex with her was kinda tricky since she's a p*rn actress

I got a 22%. So my character, Azura, is an awkward lil baby with social anxiety and only a couple close friends (really inspired by my current life situation HUH). Backstory time :) so she had a friend named Pepper, and she acted as her protector against bullies and such. Now, as the years went on, Pepper became much more confident and Azura went in the other way, as family issues developed she felt more and more as if she couldnt say a word at home or else some kind of object would be thrown at her. As a result, she relied more and more on Pepper for emotional support, but some things happen and they get into an argument. A lot of things happen, but long story short Azura ends up killing Pepper. Yeah, not the greatest thing to do when the person you killed is your best friend who is also your only emotional support? So yeah thats all where I have the story so far? I do have another bit planned where Pepper somehow comes back to life (something to do with her being of a species with an ability that grants a second life chance or something) and then a bunch of confusion follows? I have no idea. About her appearance, shes around 14-16, Blue hair with a white streak, One eye is a lighter blue than her hair while another is pure black, like more black than the kind of natural, and shes quite small, wears baggy hoodies and other loose fitting clothing because she only really gets clothes as hand-me-downs from her older brother minus her school uniform which she saved up for herself. Honestly introducing her to strangers has really got me in some inspiration to develop her story, so maybe give me some ideas on what could happen next?

i got 27%, i blame the way i made sirens work in my story.they have strange eyes that are seperated in two, and change from siren form to human form a lot. they're kiinda hated by everyone because they're seen as a big danger and are meant to be killed on sight, or turned into the police to be executed. i also put being a siren as disease for her, because thats exactly how she views it, a curse that she was given by another person at a young age. i wasnt sure if she would get high or low, because she is decently powerful and has a depressing backstory, but her main flaws all come in through her personality, she constantly puts down herself, not motivated to do anything, and she ends up being mean to the people she cares the most about. she's unstable and thinks she's a burden on her friends (not her family because she left them cause they're just kinda s---ty people).

I got 23% and honestly suspected I would get more. My OC, Ren Saito, is an oc from My Hero Academia. Her quirks (she has two which I thought would be a key factor in her mary-sue-ness) are healing (though she can only send temporary painkillers to herself and can't take away the pain for others) and mind reading (if she uses it two or more people at once or use it over an extended period she gets a headache). I made her main love interest(s) Katsuki Bakugo and Hitoshi Shinso which I also worried about - y'all gonna come for me lol.

Her father was quirkless and despised heroes, while her mother could heal others and send long-lasting painkillers to the patient. However, her mother nearly died whist trying to save an innocent bystander from harm and her father protected her, breaking his leg beyond repair. At this time Ren's healing power had manifested and her mother was in a mental hospital for the time being. Ren's dad just got out of hospital and she did something stupid.

Ren attempted to heal her father's leg, but got distracted by an on-coming sneeze. Instead of healing her father, she ended up (slight gore warning) ripping out his shin entirely and then sending it straight back down into his thigh. As he bled out, all she could do was sit and watch.

He died at precisely 6:13 on Monday.

And that is the tragic backstory of Ren Saito! There are a lot of plot holes to fill in, like: "Who was taking care of Ren?" and "Why was her mother traumatised?"

Honestly I just needed her mother out of the picture for at least an hour so Ren could accidentally kill her father. Wow, that's dark.

Alright, so I took this quiz for my Detroit Become Human fan character, an AP700 android called Lina. I got 15%, which Im not sure is accurate, although it could be.

Pretty much she worked in situation similar to Markus, where she worked for a rich human who treated as part of the family. She was named by his daughter, who named Lina after her mom, Carolina. Lina had to take care of the girl, a 7 year old whos name is Carla. She also had to clean the house for them, make their food, all the regular duties of her model. But she saw on the news what was going on outside, androids getting rounded up and sent to camps. She became a devient as a cause of it, and left that same night without telling anyone. She tried to find her way to Jericho. She almost got killed in the streets by some drunken idiots who blamed androids for everything, barely getting away in time. She was injured, and found help at Jericho. However, Lina did have to escape, like everyone else, when Jericho was attacked by the FBI. She got severely injured, getting shot at by guards. Luckily the bullets didnt hit any bio components. She ran back to her family, who had been searching for her, trying to tell themselves that she wasnt dead. They found her huddled in an alleyway near their house, and managed to patch her up before any damage could be done from the cold.

Honestly 15% is probably not enough, but I genuinely dont know

got a 40 percent

she is a demon slayer fanfic character she is a daughter of the main villain and hates the fact that her mother was very naives because that had resulted into her mother's death she basically is there to help tanjiro complet some of the missions they go on together but has many flaws and is pretty forgetful her hair is white and she has a gold eye from her mom and red from her dad.

her mom is a high ranked mage so there was some inheritance of her mothers power and because she is the daughter of the main villain she also inherited some demonic abilities

does anyone thing she is overpowered because I really don't know

also sorry about no grammer

I did the quiz four times for my four favorite OC's.

First my beloved Caroline (16%, not bad),

Second Kathryn (16% too, this one kinda surprised me because yeah I understand she has a LOT of flaws but she is too overpowered too),

Max (24% I kinda expected that. She is king Fil's daughter and has some Mary Sue characteritics. But she is a good person:D),

Fil (35%, I admit it... I expected more XD. Ok I like this OC, but I hate his attitude and his powers. He's too powerful and too arrogant! Yeah he is inteligent and more but I can't stand this man. He is based in a Gary stu that one of my school friends did so that's why I expected more percentage.)

A Well done quiz sorry If My comment is too long. Bye have a good day

19 percent, not bad! I'm looking into adding more flaws to my character eventually, but I absolutely adore her so it's hard. ;w;

My character's name is Mochi, she's short and honestly isn't that intimidating but can kill a character if she gets a good chance. She's witty and doesn't think about the consequences of her actions, even if it could possibly hurt her. She gets into lots of fights due to this. She often loses due to not having a strategy or just clawing at them until they die :D (She's a cat person/neko) She's very edgy and introverted, though very loving when you get to know her. Anyone she loves she automatically claims as her own and gets a bit jealous when they hang out with someone else. She has brown hair with a blue highlight/strip in her hair, and blue eyes. I often rotate between different stories and personalities for her, but this is the most recent one.