Is Your Character a Mary Sue? | Comments

Hm, 23% eh. I get it really, but most of my answers were a yes and no most of the time. Sort of.

Just to be clear, my oc is called Leo, fairly small kid younger then me, seems about ten but is twelve due to lack of sun and nourishment. Brown greasy hair uncut for most of the time I have had him and just slightly looks like a girl a little bit.

Now for the yes and no questions, usually related to powers or some unbelievable power up. Now first things first. The guy's hella weak as weak can get! Remember when I said he looks two years younger then if he should? That's not due to him being cute but dangerously thin and frail, his little muscles aren't going to win any fights anytime soon.

But then that leads to his...complicated abilities. He has the ability to have his soul exit his body to a invisible astral form, and can take control of someone's body if they are in any way thinking or close to death he is either gets kicked out after about a minute or two or just leaves and automatically is reverted back into his inhabited but alive body. Now for context of story, Leo ain't a smart guy, can't talk and just sort of trusts everybody, but not in a good loveable way where he convinces everybody to be his friend.

Leo lives in a pretty damned world, a slight too edgy do my tastes actually. Constantly on end exploited and overused and manipulated powers known or not, the story revolves around odd jobs he does under many different types of philosophy and influences from other people while getting a little bit of cash for essentials in a diplomatic world.

Think Kino's journey, but everybody is a bad guy. As for mental illnesses go, I sure as heck don't know anything about them, but Leo's lack of common sense and speech is constantly a problem and we all know his lack of pecs.

Seriously though, because if my mostly yes and no answers, can anybody review my short was bad summary of my decent character. One of my first oc's by the way, still new to all this.

My character is a falcon harpy named Cass (Cassiopeia). She is from my comic series “Light Weilders”. She currently has only met my deer-centaur, Vincent, but becomes a valuable member of the team. The story takes place in a world where races like elves, harpies, lamias, wilds (people who can turn into animals), etc. are common, and humans are rare. She also has only one power. She can shoot these sharp feathers from her wings, but she can’t go rapid-fire or the will cut into her arm. They also cause her to not be as fast of a flier. She has warm skin, brownish black hair, and bright blue eyes. Her clothes are a bit tribal but still contemporary in her realm. Also she can easily wear them because the shirt is sleeveless and simply ties around the neck. Is this OC ok? Should I spruce her up a bit? I got 19% Mary Sue