Is Your Character a Mary Sue? | Comments

My character feels like the cliche Mary Sue, so I was surprised she only got 18%.

Her name is Jaci (pronounced like Jackie). She's fourteen years old, lives with her parents, and owns two dogs, Goldie and Cocoa. (They're named after their coat colors) Her hair is a light brown and her eyes are emerald green, so she''s not that far of in the appearance department other that unusually bright eyes.

Her grandmother was a jeweler who loved to collect crystal figurines. One day when Jaci was visiting he grandmother, a brutal car accident occurred. Her grandmother sadly passed away in it. Jaci fell into a depression. She had loved her grandmother so much, and she felt like it was her fault because she was the one who suggested they drive to the ice cream parlor instead of walking. Jaci's family inherited her grandmother's collection of crystal figurines. Most of them are kept in a large wooden cabinet that is locked at all times. However, Jaci keeps one of them in her room. It's a beautiful red figurine of a cardinal. She loves this one specially because she helped pick out this one with her grandmother at the shop (I threw a little symbolism in there; cardinals are symbolic of a deceased loved one being near).

One day, a relative shows up at her house looking to take one of the figurines. She is known among Jaci's family for being a severe alcoholic who will sell anything to buy more booze. While trying to shove Jaci out of the way, she accidentally knocks over her cardinal figurine. It hts the ground and shatters. Jaci is furious. This is where she learns she has the power to turn things into crystals/precious gem.

At first, she is worried everyone will despise her for her power. She runs away and meets a strange creature in the forest, which she quickly befriends.

I'm still working out some plot holes, pacing issues, and such with my friends, but what do you think? Any ideas/suggestions for me o add? :D

Oh! Almost forgot! Victoria L. is not part of the Student Council, but shes on their good side (shes on all antagonist good actually). Shes a Lady of Few Words, a bit impatient, and is a mortal despite being quite strong ( the antagonists doesnt usually think about killing her mainly because shes unimportant . If she do get targeted, she could handle the situation herself sometimes or get help which is almost always around).

My character got 25%, her name is Victoria L. (Im still working on her full last name), shes 11-12 years old, and is from a high class family. She is sometime known as Tsarenity or Victoria III because she took after the first two (and one partially related) Victorias of her family. She is genuinely seen as cute and innocent and acts like that, but not many are aware of her twisted side; shes a bit emotionless, cold, verbally offensive, murderous (to the antagonists), and doesnt forgive her enemies easily. Victoria is very mature, she seen and knows more than most people around her. She sees the world as a death or life game after knowing the truth about life, thus she (secretly) lack trust in even her love ones.Shes athletic, caring, kind, have As in school (shes not the smartest character, there are +10 smarter ones), and is determine to keep her family together. Sometimes she feels as if shes not good/perfect enough compared to that of her family. She have long black hair in a ponytail, pale skin blushed with pink, and brown eyes with a prismatic glint (her family have genetic mutation), and is an average height (55-56). Im still working on her past, but overall, her past isnt the the darkest and/or the most tragic, but it involves emotional damages, some violence, a bit of death ( not all will be brutal), and (possibly) reincarnation. By the way her rich family isnt perfect, all members are diverse, there is fighting and bickering (imagine the Olympian god and goddesses but less dramatic), plus long history that involves conflicts and splitting up so many times that they may as well receive a world record (its vital and necessary). My character is also impatient and doesnt want to fall in love for personal reasons. Trivially butterflies are her main motif and shes once a loner and have a scar. So, is she a Mary Sue? I dont mind her being hated though.

Did it with another character (in an original story). 21%... I need to spice her up a bit I think. Her name is Kanna Nightingale, and she was born and raised by her poor parents in criminal territory, which is why shes so good at fighting and in shape. Shes also born with one red and and one blue eye, which is considered dangerous where she lives, so she has to wear an eyepatch. When she is 13, a rapist tries something with her 7 year old sister, and he ends up seeing her eye, and stabbing it when shes trying to protect her sister. It turns out the rapist was actually a really powerful businessman, and he frames her parents for child abuse. He bribes the judge, and manages to sentence them to life in prison. Kanna, who is now missing an eye, blames herself and her parents for what happened (long story about the parents part) and hides her injury (shes now missing her red eye) from her brother and sister, and barely interacts with them for 4 years. She also becomes an illegal fighter, because she wants to save up enough money in order to get out of the town. Im still trying to write this story, but Im failing miserably...

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I got a 23 percent, but at the same time some of the questions were a bit hard to answer for my character Loverian. Not because I dont know her traits or anything but because of her past being a bit complicated. I know that most people dont believe this about there OC but I kinda believe them for being really old due to the fact that they had to live through many lives. Like when you put your character in animes and TV shows its like your character lived that life for the soul purpose of making sure everything is ok, then leaving it by naturally dying (or insane death, which ever you prefer lol). Once they die there, they come back to there old one to spend time with family and friends for a life while staying the age they choose. I do believe that they can get up to millions of years old before they kick the bucket and that only a few types of metal can kill them and give them scars. Just a funny theory I like sticking too

I chose my character Apollyon, who I am working super hard on his backstory.. whoops. At least he's 73% not a Gary Sue, so I still passed :

(I believe the reasons he might be considered a Gary Sue is his mismatched purple and black eyes, the fact that he's 'immortal' to an extent, and that he is a king)

also this is amazing

9%

I thought it would be higher since I answered yes for the singing and prophecy questions, but I'm not complaining .

My OC is miss Roxanne DeLuise, a witty southern belle with dreams of being a rockstar.

Her destiny is to destroy a contract between a demon and a psychotic woman, with the help of her band and an old flame, in order to save rock and roll.

18%

I have to say, I expected a bit more due to my character having a decent past. But 18% is a bit surprising if I must say.

The quiz is fairly well, though the is your character 40+, and looks their age question is kind of a defect, as theyre 20 but however look their age.

All in all this is a great quiz, would recommend for anyone writing a series, getting into role-play, or just making an OC in general.

Lol My oc Mabel is 32 percent Mary Sue even though she's suicidal XD

I got 15%

I was not expecting that, because I thought my character was a little Mary Sue-ish and she is also the older sister of a cannon character from HxH

31%

Well the character I had in mind was a villain I made named illusion ssssssooooo

President Donald J. Trump is a 19% Mary Sue. Huh. The more ya know.

My older sister is a 23% sue.

I put in answers for my current main man Chrys. He ended up getting a lot lower than I thought. Though I guess this quiz doesn't account for mad scientist type characters. That and humans in the world he's from tend to be the blandest of the bunch. Only reason Chrys is as important as he is to the story is because of a prophecy he thinks is made up so his boss has a reason to hate him. He doesn't even want to fulfill it. He just wants to get paid, go home, and spend time with his husband and sons.

I took the quiz for my OC Acacia. She was stolen at the age of 2 and taken into a royal family (stay with me here). She has an incredible memory and remebers bits of her past through nightmares. She doesn't like to talk because she has a raspy voice. Anyway, Acacia doesn't look too out there. She has long, black hair and dark blue eyes. I'm surprised she only got 24% because I thought she would get more from the "kidnapped and taken into royalty" bit.