Is Your Character a Mary Sue? | Comments

In the bad situation question she gets out of it through realizing her friends would alwats be there to help her. So it's not like she was alone. But she thought she was alone and the monster feed off if that to overpower her. And that monster was a god in this universe sooooooo.

I got a 23% on my Original Character named Clarissa (she goes by Claire more often though.) I think my character was rated 23% pretty fairly, but she also isn't fully developed, I've actually been focusing on some side plots and side characters while trying to develop her more at the same time. (Here's some of her backstory and what I'm trying to accomplish.)

So basically, this story started from a dream (I actually want to do the same thing when I have the money.) I had at the starting of 2020, some characters were going on a road trip. I don't know they're reasons, maybe they just wanted adventure? Anyways, they all had many flaws, one girl was fairly overweight and was discouraged about dating at all. But her group of friends helped her gain confidence and she actually ended up having some sort of love triangle with some already existing characters that were with them. And they basically just explored their universe. But I've come a long way with MY actual universe that has my OC Claire in it. Their government is trying it's best to keep its citizens safe, but some characters in my side plot discuss that more and what is going on behind closed doors. Claire and her friends come from all walks of life and want to find their place in the world. She brings a close friend of hers from school along the way with her. She has no mental illnesses so far, I'm not attracted to the idea of her (the protagonist) having a severe mental illness, side characters mostly represent the problems people face with certain mental issues. She is rather moody and can snap sometimes. She actually started as a self-insert character, but I'm slowly trying to make here, her own person and NOT just me. I think I would feel too vulnerable to have a character that close to myself being public anyways. Anyways, she is supposed to grow as a person at the end, as for other characters stay the same, the biggest problem I think I'm facing is not thinking of how the story ends... I know I won't be

Yay!

My Five Nights at Freddys OC is named Pom and she is 0% Mary Sue.

15%...ok. My OC had a rough past with her father, cause hes a sociopath that murdered her mom and sister in front of her, she managed to barley get away. Sooo...yeah I guess thats accurate

i got 24% for my oc, lowkey thought it'd be higher :") but uhh anyways heres my oc because everyone is is explaining theirs!!! also, sorry if i did any grammatical errors or punctuation errors, i swear i'm not a cringey 10 year old.

so, my chracters name is mei muzushima and you can probably tell by the name she is japanese. please don't judge me, i'm australian-japanese and i'm not some weeaboo. anyways, she is a bisexual girl just trying to get through life with a massive need to control everything. like, this girl plans out everything in her life and if it doesn't go to plan she has a full on panic attack and a breakdown. she developed this because her and her mother (single parent, babey!!) moved alot and that caused her to crave that little drop of stability and comfort. she has really nice, long, elbow length black hair and has pretty plain black eyes (i think i modelled this after yumeko jabami, i have a crush on that woman please be nice to me). she also uses alot of jokes to hide her pain and even though she went through alot of s---, she is really positive and tries to romanticise her life and tries to think it's all a ghibli movie.

onto her powers !! since i'm a teen, i have to add this, please don't hate me. girl basically has water bending, period. downside is that literally every night she has to plug herself with a iv to hydrate herself because even though she is only controlling water, it still is really taxing on her body and if she uses it too much, girl is f---ed.

she is part of the military because she wanted to make her workaholic mother proud (even if she wanted to become a fashion designer.) and she puts alot of other peoples emotions above her own.

ok, this is getting long. and if you've read through this, thank you and if you are going to reply, please give me any tips. i'm really new to the writing scene and i wanna learn how to write better.

I did another test, but for my oc Eliot Yohei. I got a 21%. I don't really see it, he has only one power which is the ability to move stars around, but he can't bring them down to earth. He has a pretty normal life, he came out as trans and his parents didnt like that so he ran away. He never contacted them again and just went to live with his friend at their apartment. The only mental disorder he has is BPD and or DID(personality disorders.) He's completely human. His hair is black and his eyes are amber, almost yellow. He never hurt anyone. He's only 16 and he's growing quickly, he can't control himself and often breaks down if he feels things aren't working out the way he wants them to, ex; He seems to be doing well with the person he likes, then the person he likes goes and sleeps with another man. He feels like it's his fault. I feel like he's not much of a Gary Sue, but I'm not sure. Also, he's extremely weak and underweight, he's barely able to do anything.

The OC I used for this quiz goes by the name of Blue Zynophere. She was originally created for the fandom DDLC, but she's become a whole different OC, and I never use her in anything relating to DDLC anymore.. so I guess she's not a fandom oc. She's an angel with naturally blonde hair, but she dyed it blue and green eyes. She's 17, simply 2 years older than me. She was born in Japan but her dad is American and her mother is British. She kind of does have an 'edgy' backstory. She got kidnapped and kinda killed her dad on accident- her dad was trying to kill her boyfriend who was trying to kill Blue because Blue was being really stupid- she regretted it. Her mom yelled at her everyday for killing her father, she deserved it. She always acted like a demon, not an angel like she was supposed to. Eventually her mom got arrested after starting to physically abuse Blue. That's pretty much everything about her, unless you include my friend's ocs who heavily influenced her popularity. She doesn't really have any powers besides her wings, and her only mental disorders are depression and bipolar. Also. She's flatter than Natsuki.

My new OC name is Petty the soldier gal. She had a dark past withe her parents.

My OC is Emily she had a dark past, she's a vampire and she's 29% Mary Sue.

Ive done this quiz so many times but most of my characters get 15 or lower. My lowest being 10%. I feel like I should fix her?

Valerie Decon (De-kin)

Shes 25 when it starts. Grew up in a household of several children due to her father constantly marrying and divorcing several women so he can get more children to experiment on ( so original, I know.) All the children have similar abilities varying slightly between them unless their twins, which she is (Twin brother). She shares a link with her brother and on their birthday every year they have to fight until one dies or it hits midnight, ending their birthday. All the sibling eventually get separated after their father cause this apocalyptic world from an experiment gone wrong. Shes trying to live in the new world she was thrown into at 16 and avoid her siblings. Some hate her, about two dont and some dont give a damn if shes dead of alive. She, however, inherited a disease from her mother. Its similar to Hemophilia but she has episodes of blurry vision, blood splurging everywhere and migraines. She has extreme OCD, and can come across as cold, brutish, and b----y at times. Well, shes cold and stiff pretty much all the time. Again, didnt get a high score but I feel like I still need to change her in order for her to be...idk better?

i got 30% mary sue ovo
so uh basically
its name is ayumi
and uh

the backstory is a bit embarrassing and cringe waa

so uh
[only listing DrAmAtIc parts cuz yes]
-shes some kind of- g l i t c h lmao
-she was "made" in a lab (oh no the cringe)
-she saw her stepparents d i e mUaHaHa
-got put into lab again for like 7 years oof
-e s c a p e s
-finds friend lol
-[time for extreme cringe]
-a h e m

-her "bestie" leaves her and she tries to find her

-oop rip she gets shot by some lab guy from (obviously) the lab

-epic revive cuz she be glitchy
i have nothing more yet

I got 16% Mary Sue, and I honestly thought it'd be higher.

Basically, my character is a wolf named Abilene. She's tiny and has a high-pitched voice even though she's 35, and always says it's because of her breed. She's an amazing healer, but also blind. She has special fireflies, their light changes color when it lands on something, so she can see it. The fireflies respond and do what she says. She has no unnatural colors or anything like that. My story involves some other characters, like Dakota and Skull who are German brothers that admire her skill. Natalie and Natalia who are twins, Natalie is really stupid, but Natalia is mute so can't really speak up against the retarded things she says. There's also Starla and Mocha, who aren't really main characters but appear in every other scene since they're her neighbors. Abilene is continuously shipped with Mocha by Starla, and Abilene is always extremely disgusted by it. Mocha is a pup and Abilene looks like a pup so... God, okay. This is too long, lemme just- Bye.

Got around a 30% Mary Sue, didn't know what I was expecting and my character is still vastly unwritten for now, but that's alright.

For those out of the loop, my character is Maru "Pluto" Realta. In the universe he comes from, planets and moons have vast concentrations of godly energy at their cores, called World Souls, which can be forged into god-like avatars. Maru is the World Soul of the dwarf planet Pluto. He is aware of a prophecy of a human-borne beast who ushers in an era of chaos and discord, bringing an end to all life in the solar system. And what does Maru, a human-borne beast do? He ushers in an era of chaos and discord, bringing an end to all life in the solar system, naively believing that ending humanity will put a stop to the prophecy, whilst at the same time fulfilling it. The story involves so many other characters, including Eris, Arrokoth, Sedna, Nemesis, Nibiru, Tyche, and so many others I could not name all of them here.

Hope y'all enjoyed; I look forward to your thoughts.

26% is lower than I was expecting - these tests are unable to take a lot of context into the equation, so they tend to be inaccurate at best and should be taken with a grain of salt.

Though I guess I know how to handle my overpowered, immortal energy beings well if all a major leader scores is 26% on a casual test when being one of the most powerful pieces in the game, so to speak.

But then, I also just focus on making my characters be well-rounded people first and foremost, and worry about anything else later.

The character I ran through this is an angel named Ambriel, who is the angel of harmony. Very powerful by mortal standards, and able to draw upon the energies of his home plane to augment his own when needed.

He's also a sweetheart dork who gets stage fright and has been through his fair share of troubled and fantastic experiences.

Uh i guess 30% isn't bad? I did think it would be higher... my characters name is logan. They are about 18 in human years, shaggy purple hair, purple eyes, and half human/half angel. As a child his dad had to run away with him as the angels hunted them down because cross species breeding was bad (His father was an archangel). They found a place in "heaven" to hide for a while. Anyway, they were caught before he turned 10 and the dad was killed, and the kids wings were ripped off, throwing him to earth. He was taken in by a friend (now bf) and yeah. Now hes fighting alongside them.

Holy cow, 27%

My oc is named Malina Jade Coswell, (one of seven main characters yes theyre ALL main characters) shes 14, has blonde-brown hair, and jade green eyes. When she was 4 years old her mom left her at a big school for elementalists from different dimensions to train for the war. Now, Malina is a darkness elementalist, but was unable to awaken her power for years. Blah blah blah stuff happens (too long and detailed, youll get bored) she gets her powers of controlling the shadows and stuff, and oooo juicy plot she kills her best friend/requited love with a gun.

Umm what else. Oh ya she can selfish and smug, and sometimes overly-cruel(in battle?). Shes kinda dependent on her friends cause theyre the only ones shes got, and one of them, who shares the same element as her, can stop her if she gets to voilent.

But, yknow overall shes a good person, cause in the end she noticed not just her friends mistakes but also hers, and was able to save the real good guy.

Well I cant think of anything else so thats all for now.

Thanks for reading my probably-crappy description

In Aquila's case, the main head is selfish, smug, reckless, and often cruel, while her other head is friendly, soft, and 'girly' so to speak

In one of the final episodes she will lose her 'good' head in a dramatic swordfight, causing her severe trauma, and forever changing her into a cruel monster. She eventually joins a group of bandits, becomes it's leader, and grows it into a large army of outcasts, pillaging and plundering the lands far and wide.

A got a 14%! I guess I could really spice the character up a bit :)

My character's name is Aquila (Eagle from latin). Her kind has the same physique as humans, except light green skin and two heads (her name is a pun, referencing the double-headed eagles on most European coat-of-arms). She was born to a poor family in a small town, and was orphaned at 5. She roamed around for a few years begging for food, until she was picked up by some bandits. She grew up with them, and eventually started pillaging with them. She became very good at melee combat because of being left handed (which in real life gives a lot of advantage in a sword-fight). At the age of 20 she left the band, and became a mercenary. At the beggining of the story itself she and her 2 friends work at a bar in a random god-forsaken town, and essentually protect it from other bandits in exchange for staying rent-free at the second floor of the building. They still need to get money however, and so they take stereotypical adventure quests from strangers that end up going through that bar. The story is for an animated series in the making, and every episode will be a different mini-adventure, kind of like Rick and Morty in terms of length.

There is also a special way members of Aquila's race grow up:

In adults, both heads have polar-opposite personalities, but despite that are more or less in sync. They have 1 will and mind however, and balance eachother out. Every adult has 1 dominant head, which ends up defining in which direction the personality goes. That head can talk, while the secondary head is mute for life. Despite the main head making the decisions, the second head always has influence over it.

When they are born, both heads are mute. As the child grows, both heads develop those polar personalities, and eventually, based on the decisions and unbringing,one of the heads becomes the dominant one and gains the ability to speak, roughly at the age of 12.

In Aquila's case, the main head is selfish, smu