Is Your Character a Mary Sue? | Comments

I got 11% for my character. I'm writing a story using her. I'll just write about her.

Her name is Larka Kiea, she lives in a fantasy world. (Reason why her name is like that) She has curly tawny hair with deep tan skin and grey eyes. She's an assassin who joins a gang in book 2. (Reading the story will help make sense) She became an assassin because she found out her husband was cheating on her with her friend. She didn't have the greatest relationship with her parents. But the backstory wasn't tragic. Before she was an assassin, she was a musician, it plays a big part in the story. How do you like her?

Are my characters that bland? Did it for two of my characters and got 10% and 11%. It said I could probably use some spicing.

My ocs are Carolina and Sam. Theyre both demons and he demons powers are all stored up in a bottle theyre all born with and if another demon steals the bottle they can use it. But if the bottle gets destroyed or all the liquid in to spills out the demon dies.

Sam is a lower middle class demon. Her main ability is to hear sounds well, but she steals some other abilities from other demons later on. Shes not very appealing but not unpleasant to look at either. Shes 24-25 years old, got blue eyes and red hair, and is very athletic. She dies later after getting her bottle stolen and broken by my angel oc.

As for Carol I thought she would be in the Mary sue category considering that shes a nobility amongst the demons, is attractive, rich, and powerful. Literally her only flaw is her lack of physical strength and her s---ty personality. Her main power is to control people like puppets but she stole a lot more from other demons. Shes 30+ years old and loses her arms and a horn after being mauled by another demon oc.

Wow I got 12%

My ocs Sadoko. Shes got light brown hair, dark brown eyes and a furry personality. Shes got a phobia of being left behind and thats basically the majority of the story. To sum it up, its a story of love and loss and her path to recovering from her first loves tragic departure. As well as some fantasy/supernatural elements, as her former love comes back as a ghost (who sticks with Sadoko for a year while helping her recover from her loss). I plan to write the story EVENTUALLY but, Ive got the characters down :,D

Got 11% for a Pokemon OC.

My character's name is Elena who is a protegee of Lance and Claire from Pokemon. Blonde, blue hair, and really pale, she has spent majority of her life training in caves. Elena, like most dragon trainers, love dragon pokemon.

She has an overtrained, spoiled Hydreigon (because of favoritism) which she needed to woo and bribe for him to actually follow her orders. She learned from this and thus was able to train her Dragonair properly which by far is her best pokemon. The rest of her party include Gible, Fraxure, and Bagon who she unfortunately was not able to train much because of said obsessive favoritism for Hydreigon and she would get reprimanded by Lance and Claire because of this behavior. She has a huge crush on Lance, might even say a simp for him, but does not get the kind of attention she wanted from him as Lance remains professional with her. Claire uses this info as some sort of blackmail for Elena to actually shape up with her training. Having to have her name and reputation stained in Lance's eyes as her biggest fear, she strives to be noticed by and impress him in all the ways she could, sometimes embarrassingly so.

%24 percent a Mary Sue! Her name is Melanie and she is a teal alien. The whole story is about monsters but the quiz doesn't really know that- So if she was a normal human the percentage would probably be a little lower. Melanie was bullied as a child because she used to go to an all human school, as it was the only school in her area. Her father was able to get a new job as a reason to move so she could go to a place with people like her, a school of monsters! She meets other people and falls in lOvE with a white alien. Aka a legendary colored alien. As they have a whole ranking system depending on their color. She also meets a team of monsters who are basically trying to destroy the whole human race. Now i'll stop explaining before this gets too long :'D

I got a 21%, which isn't bad, especially since the character I did this with is a fan character. Her name is Jorii Aoki, and she's a Jojo oc who is Jotaro's cousin. Not gonna write her whole story out, but basically one of Dio's assassins kills her parents and kidnaps her sister, so she goes with the crusaders to Egypt. Her Stand's name is Material Girl and it's basically just tactical glitter. Its ability is to make anything it covers as hard as diamond, and we all know that diamond is unbreakable. *gets ran over by a bus for making that awful joke*

My characters parents were murdered, shes a teen, shes (minor) royalty -- but I cant change any of that because I'm doing a role playing writing thing with my friends and those are the basics for most of the characters. Its like a school for royalty but all the parents were assasinated and spies have infiltrated the school playing as royals. I only got 24%, which isn't bad considering the pretty cliche background. She's pretty normal looking and can get really jealous so that helped I think. Any suggestions?

My character is a Red Dead OC Born in 1839. His name is Lee Evans. He had a bad relationship with his parents as he had different ideals regarding slavery. He was kicked out with his brother in '55 and enlisted in the Union army in '62. He survived but his brother did not. He became a gunslinger and was involved in gunfights throughout the 1860s-1910s. Most being in the 1880s. Lee became a Lawman in '78 and was relieved in '84. He was elected Marshal of a Utah town in '03 but was shot in the back of the head

10% Mary sue!
He also has PTSD...

22% Hmmmmmmmm the character I test with is Vivianwa Kowane, the character I literally ripped myself then put as a character from the name, personality and down to the backstory but her appearance is better than me because I suck at replicating things?? So of course if someone hates her I take it as a personal attack because she's literally me but appearance-wise, a little better. So for starter her eyes isn't that compare small to me, and she's have doesn't have some kind of scare left over all over her limbs and her skin is lighter because light skin is my country's beauty standard. and she has a unnatural color hair and eyes but nobody cares because it's hard to tell they dyed or use contact or not because the natural occurring hair is very wild.

Hmmm body shape???? EVeryone except my family telling me that I have a nice body shape (I have average bmi with pear body shape). Smart?? Most people expect that because I ducking read English fiction online daily even more that my mother language and they would ask me to teach them part they not understand if not for the fact that I have awfully bad social skills and (very) bad tamper.

15% on one character Ive been lining up the story for. Theres a country populated by dragons(Endross), one by mainly elves(Lorent), and one that was recently united into Zoso from the previous beastkin city-states. With the previously disorganized manner of beastkin governance, they were often taken as slaves by elves and a few dragons as well. Elves also have the tendency to buy/have them captured as test subjects for various experiments. With the Zosoan Revolution that united beastkin, the ones in captivity also demanded better treatment and revolted, killing many innocent elves and dragons in the process. One such case left behind a child called Aiko Korikos, because I have a ton of other dragon characters named in a similar style. The hatchling is raised in Lorent, in a city known for its impressive accomplishments in the fields of magical(yes this does exist) and alchemical(this too) research. She has a happy childhood, with a few minor incidents of bullying, but mainly people being distant for her being a dragoness and not an elf. She looks different, so its a given. The orphanage she grew up in was actually run by an elf family, two parents and two girls. She gets along well with them and is raised as the only orphan for 17 years, as they decide to adopt her and close the orphanage as it wasnt official either way. She eventually grows up and gets a job at a research facility since being a maid just wasnt making enough money. There, she gains some ties to the criminal underworld and gains an interest in botany. She starts cultivating dangerous plants that are safe to most humanoids, creating a crossbreed of two flowers. One of these two flowers was kieta, a flower that collects mana in the day and discharges the extra in a glowing halo at night. The petals slowly crystallize into mana crystals and fall off as new ones grow in. The other was amaryllis, a bright red flower which has the magical property of releasing fire element magic(not actual fire) that des

I got 15% and honestly, I thought it would be waaaay more.

I'm writing a story about four boys at a boarding school in 1978, just trying to get by. I decided to go with my favorite character (don't tell the other three) to see if I needed to spruce him up a little.

His name is Hermann Shoemaker. Hermann was diagnosed with Multiple Sclerosis when he was five, and he has gone through many surgeries, and many canes, crutches, and wheelchairs. His parents are middle class, his alcoholic father who he never saw and his mother who was holding onto the marriage because her catholic upbringing has told her to.

He has dark brown hair with sideburns, that is literally ALWAYS in cowlicks because he literally doesn't care at all. His ears are big and stick out,and his nose is hooked and beak-shaped. He's human, 16 years old (but he acts and dresses like he's 70), and speaks in "The Queen's English" (A more posh and refined English accent). He has insomnia and OCD, and he's all about numbers and patterns

Hermann is the type of guy that wears hand-me-down sweater vests and blazers to class, and because of his back disease, his cane gives him a proper, upright poster. He's stuffy and uptight, hates talking about himself in anyway shape-or-form. He loves math with a passion, and it calms his when he is stressed.

Hermann has a crush on one of his three friends, Theodore (Theo) Ace. Yeah, Hermann is gay whatcha gonna do about it. Anyway, Theo has Tourette's, and because Theo has literal DISGUSTING parents that never gave him the proper care he needed, Hermann prioritized on making Theo feel safe and comfortable when he is having lots of tics. Slowly, Theo began to trust Hermann and honestly, I've found myself kinda making them flirt with each other (or at least try to, because they're both social awkward dorks)

Is there any changing I need to do with Herm? Let me know please!

I did the quiz four times for my four favorite OC's.

First my beloved Caroline (16%, not bad),

Second Kathryn (16% too, this one kinda surprised me because yeah I understand she has a LOT of flaws but she is too overpowered too),

Max (24% I kinda expected that. She is king Fil's daughter and has some Mary Sue characteritics. But she is a good person:D),

Fil (35%, I admit it... I expected more XD. Ok I like this OC, but I hate his attitude and his powers. He's too powerful and too arrogant! Yeah he is inteligent and more but I can't stand this man. He is based in a Gary stu that one of my school friends did so that's why I expected more percentage.)

A Well done quiz sorry If My comment is too long. Bye have a good day

I got 23% My character is a girl she is a cat human hybrid but its normal in the universe. She has baby pink hair due to being born with bleach blond hair and when she is anxious, sad, angry etc negative emotions her scalp bleeds causing a permanent color. her Name is chinoki (death kiss shortened )the reason is this: (her father is not abusive this was just a thing he did to remember the cause of chinokisus mothers death) he named her that after the mother had died giving birth to chinoki (for short). Otherwise he was a loving father who wanted the best. hes abstract minded so hes not a big part of the story. Chinoki finds herself on the first day of school speechless due to a boy named junkokoro (pure heart shortened) she was attracted to his name because it was a polar opposite to hers. (Yandere girl, yes) anyway setting that aside she does creepy things but she suffers from depression and anxiety and is prone to be a little out of her rocker. she is 14 and shes otherwise normal the cat ears and tail are white and she is most commonly found in hoodies/ sweatpants or her school uniform witch is standard looking. She does not have paranormal powers shes just crazy. She has a friend named savimew my friends oc maybe she will tell you about that

I was very surprised that my character only got 7%, because in my roleplay group we always make fun of this particular character because she's so over-the-top. Then again, I suppose her flaws do make up for it. I wasn't sure what to put for the royalty/nobility question because while she is the king's niece, she grew up in poverty, as her uncle married his way into the throne.

22% for my character Target, I have a book on wattpad called Purchase where stores are characters and Target is just the transgender cinnamon roll who has a short temper and a short height. Shortest of his friends, actually. /so precious to me/ But wowie, 22%? Target is almost everything I'd want to be and is slightly based off of me but wowza ._.

I got 35%, and I was just answering the quiz about myself. Like, literally my whole life and personality was used to answer the questions. My own existence, in real life, is closer to a Mary Sue than most of these people evaluating their own fictional characters. Maybe the defining characteristics behind a "Mary Sue" should be reconsidered at this point? You can have a goddamn tragic past and not be looking for attention.

18% not bad

Since everyone posts their ocs I guess I will to

Her name is Briar Rose, she is from a country known for not having any powers but still rivaling the strongest country, she trained her whole life to protect her country from beasts because of an incident that led to them getting kicked out of the continent and getting no rights/privilege of protection. She found out about the truth of the reason why us because her ancestor made weapons that scared the celestial royalty(highest royalty, like the noble of nobles) so they killed the ancestor and threw away the country. And so she decided to gather the weapons(which are given to different countries as treasure) then kill the celestial royalties.

No tragic past if you don't count the fighting off beasts to survive

I was afraid she is too op because I had to make her be able to fight entire countries but I managed to do some plot to make her over average but not godlike op

I was really glad she didn't turn out to be a mary sue

23% for me!

My character is my danganronpa self-insert oc! Her name is Ramiko Kinos---a, she doesnt have any special powers due to the fact powers dont really exist in Danganronpa, its just teens trying to escape a school.

Shes 18-19 years old, has black hair thats into two small down pig tails, Shes African American (In real life my skin tone is more of a lighter brown color, but my Dr oc is fully colored brown.) And her outfit is mostly black and grey, and has an athletic body shape.

She is the Ultimate Personal Fitness Trainer.

She doesnt have any trauma surprisingly, and It kinda makes me feel like my oc is kinda Mary Sue-ish.. its because I cant really think of any type of traumatizing backstory for her. I may change this if I ever do update my oc lore.

My oc lives with her Mother, Grandmother, Grandfather, and Dog!

(I live with my Mom, Grandmother, and dog irl. But my Grandfather passed away in 2018, Rest In Peace to him.)

I shipped my oc with Chihiro Fujisaki! Hes my comfort and highest kin character.

I wanted to make my oc have a female muscular type of body due to the fact I wanted to make my oc look a bit unique!

Chihiro is a shy person, so I decided to do the opposite with my oc and make her strong!

This is a good tip if you want to make self-insert ocs! Try to make your oc kinda the opposite than the character your self-shipping yourself with.