How Original Is Your Warrior Cats OC? | Comments, Page 12
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his name is dreamwalker and he is mainly black and white with a red tail and ears he has black dots on his ears and a tail he is a prophecy cat with three mentors to keep him from going evil he can walk in peoples dreams an has an evil twin.
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Eh. Not a very good OC to be honest. This is just my opinion, but I'm sure others would say the same thing in a different way, so I'm here to help you.
Dreamwalker, while a very cool name, is very overused. I've seen this name on several cats and think about it.
Leader: Bluestar
Deputy: Redtail
Med.Cat: SpottedleafWarriors: Longtail, Darkstripe, Lionheart, Dreamwalker, Tigerclaw.
What stands out? I'm sure you thought "Dreamwalker" and while this may be a good thing in your head, a name that stands out a lot from the others is a good indicator of a Mary Sue/Gary Stu.
Also, there should be a backstory. What was this cat's past? How does it effect his everyday life and personality traits? If he has a prophecy, maybe tell us more about it. He has an evil twin? Try saying what he/she does to be evil, and also maybe stay away from the term 'evil twin' and switch to something like (Assuming it is a male figure, maybe not) wicked brother. Stay away from giving cats powers. There is only three cats in the entire warriors universe with magic, and we should probably keep it that way in ours.
And my last tip: GRAMMAR! Add periods, commas, capital letters so that you comment is more appealing! I forgot to breathe while reading this. Whew! That's all my tips for now, hopefully someone reads this.
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(In that last part I mean your comment, not you comment lol. Sorry about that.)
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My OC's name is Honeysong. She is a white she-cat with pale yellow legs, tail,muzzle, and ears. She also has one pale green eye and one pale blue eye.she is very sleek and tall.
Honeysong was born one leaf-fall with her 2 sisters, Hazelkit and Fernkit.
Hazelkit is white with brown tabby splotches and speckles, while Fernkit is white with ginger paws and ears. Their mother's name is Soulstar, leader of Moonclan. Soulstar is white with brown tabby splotches and speckles, and a brown tabby tail. Their father, Aldertail, Deputy of Moonclan, is white with a ginger tail, muzzle, and ears.
While they were growing up as kits in the nursery, they often annoyed their older brother, Oakpaw. Oakpaw is a dark brown tabby tom with white paws. Oak paw never liked playing with his little sisters, and he hated Honeykit.
When Honeykit became Honeypaw, her mentor was Berryfur. Berryfur taught her everything she now knows, and has retired to the elders den with Stonestrike. Honeypaw's mother then gave her the warrior name Honeysong, representing her free spirit and will(nothing to do with her sharp mouth, hehe).
Around 5 moons after becoming a warrior, she fell in love with a Cloudclan warrior. Honeysong knew that her love was only worse because her mother was leader of Moonclan, but she couldn't help her love for Snowoak. Snowoak is a white and silver tabby with brown paws and brilliant green eyes. Then, 2 moons after they began meeting, Honeysong was expecting Snowoak's kits. Snowoak was very excited, but Honeysong this was bad for both clans. Later when she tried to tell Snowoak he couldn't raise the kits, he attacked her slashing her muzzle and scarring it forever. Honeysong never spoke to him again, and, when her mother and father discovered she was pregnant, she lied about their father and said it was Oakpelt, a mottled brown tom who had died right before she found out she was expecting kits.
When the kits were born, they were both female
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#moonclan ;)
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lol well looks like we got another moonclan
MoonWisp2
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My Oc's name is Snowy`Willow of RiverClan
Shes a white she-cat with extremely fluffy fur and gray stripes as a queen she was loving and gentle, as a warrior she was hard-headed and strong. Once she was an elder, still keeping her gentle attitude, she hid it away.
She had 3 kits known as Little'Kit, Fuzzy'Kit, and Birch'Kit
Their father decided to go with them to show them the frozen river Little'Kit fell through while chasing a beetle, so Little'Kit died. Fuzzy'Kit was taken by a hawk while trying to catch a Butterfly. And her last kit grew to be a Medicine cat. He recently received his name Birch'Cloud. Birch'Cloud fell in love with a tabby she-cat known as Beetle'Mask. So he got demoted and died of battle wounds. Her mate Treetrail joined her in the elders den for many moons. Treetrail eventually died of age complications, But Snowy knew that she'd see her beloved again, so wasted no tears. She lives out her life disecting Butterflies moths and beetles. She's taken care of by a brown tabby apprentice named Otter'Paw. They eat together and talk constantly. Snowy is well taken care of by the apprentices. She always talks about how she knows that Tree'trail and her children are taking care of eachother, and when she joins starclan. She wont be afraid. Right now she is 76 moons old. She lives with Silver'Stare, Snake'Eye. Dead'Sun, Crippled'Rose, and Lost'Flower. She got a 76 rating :)
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Just to let you know your username is so cute!
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JUST KIDDING XD
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My Ocs name is Echosong of riverclan. She is a long-haired white furred warrior with light gray at the tips of her ears, paws and tail. She has one green eye and one blind blue eye. She has a long scar covering her blind eye. Her mother was Rowanblaze of riverclan and her father was a rogue from windclan named Reaper. They had a litter of six kittens, including Echosong. Mousekit, Nightkit, Berrykit, Badgerkit and Duskkit were all Echosongs siblings. Nightkit and Duskkit were still-born, named after the darkness that claimed their lives. Mousekit and Berrykit both were born sickly and didnt make it through the night. Echokit and Badgerkit were the only ones left. Rowanblaze loved them fiercely and feared everything would hurt them. She couldnt bear to lose another kit. When they became apprentices, Reaper came to claim what was rightfully his- Echopaw and Badgerpaw. He wanted his daughters to come live the life of a rogue with him-as exiled clan cats. He demanded that Marshstar, leader of riverclan, exile the young cats immediately, or else he would kill them all. Rowanblaze rushed out and stood between her mate and her kits. Knowing she wouldnt give them up that easily, Reaper threatened to kill Echopaw if Rowanblaze didnt give up Badgerpaw. When Rowanblaze hesitated for a split second, Reaper ran his long, sharp claw down Echopaws face, stopping right above her one blue eye. Then, he jerked it down all the way through her eye and down her cheek, scarring her for life. Her blue eye was blind. Rowanblaze attacked him, and Echopaw watched through blood filled eyes as Reaper tore out his mates throat. Rowanblaze lay dead in the clearing. Reaper grabbed Badgerpaw by the scruff and ran away. Marshstar ordered a patrol to find them, but Reaper had his ways. Badgerpaw was never seen again. Echopaw was on her own. Sitting vigil for Rowanblaze that night, she let out a long, sad wail, giving her the warrior name Echosong. She soon became mates with Pebblenose, a stocky brow
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My OC is RedWater, a Riverclan calico Tom with golden eyes and a disfigured foot from birth. He has an older sister, RippleSong; a younger brother, OrangeStream; and his youngest sister, CherryKit. As an apprentice, his mother was exiled (I still need to make up a reason uuuhhh lets just say she killed someone I promise Ill get to this soon) whilst trying to leave their clan, their mother fell into the gorge due to tiredness. The three siblings were distressed, but nonetheless kept going to the hollows where they were attacked by a fox. CherryKit had died to injuries and RippleSong was left with a permanently disabled eye. OrangeStream was stupid and ran the thunder path, you know what happens next. RippleSongs Eye eventually caught an infection from not having it be treated properly, and she had joined her sister and brother.
RedWater joined a rogue group, though he doesnt talk, he is snappy, rude and not afraid to hurt feelings if he needs to. Hes the one to talk sense into the other cats with sharp words and a strong gaze- even Wing, one of the bigger and stronger rogues in the group, is scared of him.
RedWater is small, skinny and unable to hunt due to his leg, but he can and will pack a mean punch if he needs to. Hes not the type to start physical fights, either. Minor PTSD from all the trauma hes been through, things like foxes, the gorge and the thunder path are enough to trigger his PTSD and make him lose it. Though he doesnt show it, hes grown to love his rogue group and wont hesitate to fight if they get hurt.
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That is actually a GREAT OC!
Jewlxels1
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my OC's Name is Shadowpelt. She is the main character in her book.
Shadowpelt is a dark grey She-cat with lighter areas on her snout, underbelly and the tip of her tail. she has a long poofy tail, blue eyes and a scar on the right side of her face her brother gave to her when he betrayed her clan.
Shadowpelt is still young she is 8 moons old.
Shadowpelt is a very strong, sassy warrior of Shadeclan. She keeps her opinion to herself most of the time but when she needs to she shares it.
her mother is Willowtail, a strong clan born senior warrior, and her father is a calico kittypet named Patch. Shadowpelt has a twin sister and 2 twin brothers. her twin sister is Callie, her twin brothers are Sunny, and Socks. Callie is a small calico kittypet, Sunny is a mainly golden yellow calico and Socks is a dark grey kittypet with light grey paws. Shadowpelt also has and older brother, Shadeclaw a light grey warrior of Darkclan, he betrayed his clan and ran away to Darkclan after a near death attack by a fox.
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My OCs name is Softpaw. They are male and were always judged by their soft and fluffy appearance. They are very feisty and angry, however. They are white with light brown markings.
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My oc is named coyote storm. Hes the deputy of wind-clan. Hes a fluffy tan-and faded ginger Tom.Hes gentle,and kind yet brave ,and loyal.He got a 72% although his pattern is common. My strong/gentle boi got be 72%. Idk how but he did!
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My OC's name is Viperstrike. He's a background character that I would like to use in some roleplays. (Please I really want to find some warrior cat roleplays.)
Viperstrike is a white tom with a black nose and blaze along his nose bridge. He has green eyes, and slender front black socks, and black hind paws. His tail is pretty short, half the size of a normal one, and is pure black. Also his ears are black.
Viperstrike is pretty old, 48 moons.
Viperstrike is quick-witted, blunt, and sassy. He isn't afraid to share his opinion, especially among cats he isn't really scared of, which is most of the cats in his clan. He also isn't afraid to show his true feelings for a cat, if he develops feelings for them, he'll immediately share them. But, if denied, he'll become pretty resentful. He dislikes kits and apprentices, but can tolerate them to a point. He likes to call out to she-cats sometimes if he finds them pretty.
Viperstrike was born in a small forest outside of the Clans' territories, but his home was in the opposite direction of the mountains. It was a bit hot there, and the forest was denser than Thunderclan's territory. His mother was abused by his father, which really traumatized him. Although his siblings tried to defend their mother, Viper, (known as White at the time), held back, because he was too scared of his father. One day, his siblings went missing. His mother wasn't panicked like him, instead she was grieving. She knew what he didn't, that his father had done something to them. A few days after, White and his mother ran out of the territory. They came on a ridge, and spotted the glistening lake at the center of diverse territories. Desperate for water, they traveled days to the lake, until they finally reached the Shadowclan marshes. They met with Shadowclan cats, and were accepted into the clan. His mother expressed her feelings about he disbelief in Starclan. Some extremists pulled them outside of camp, about 7 cats. These cats consisted of the lea
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Great OC!
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I reccomend for the best role playing expericence, you should play on Roblox, Warrior Cats Ultimate Edition. The models are amzing! and they have herbs to collect you can heal cats and you can get scars and the actions are great.
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I see that the most recent comment is from two months ago. I totally agree that you should try out Warrior Cats Ultimate Edition (or WCUE fro short). They just updated and added in some prey and remodled the camp a couple of months ago. Idk if you will see this but I would definitly reccomend WCUE for someone looking for a rp game. It is on roblox btw.
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Yeah WCUE is GREAT. Its just added new crouching animations and more prey! Squirrels and frogs! I can't wait for the new models. If your looking for a Roleplaying game this is the game for you!
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my OC is called lightning paw she is a fully black she cat and she will be the next leader of shadow clan as she is the daughter of the leader and she is evil because the thunder clan cats killed her mum and 3 of her 4 litter mates and also they killed her best friend storm paw who she had a crush on so now she doesn't let anyone in in fear that they to will die from your fellow quiz maker Draco.
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Could I get a period somewhere? Grammar is one thing you should work on. Also, that is a little tragic. Why did Thunderclan kill those cats? Is there anything happy about this? What does Lightningpaw look like? Also, in the future, stray away from names long and awkward like "Lightning". It sounds better in the long run, trust me. Why was she called Lightningkit? If it had anything to do with her looks I wouldn't know, because you didn't list any. In summary, this OC isn't that great, but I've seen worse. Keep trying! :)
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My OC's name is Virgo, she's part of a rogue group. She is blue-black with a bit of white on her tail and has one green eye and one blue eye. She is deputy and her best friend got exiled from their group. Shenis mainly nice but when she's mad it isn't pretty. Thanks for making this quiz!
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my oc is Frostedthorn, she's a shadowclan cat in a alternative universe. She as a bully who ended up relizing the harm she caused and stoped hanging out with her siblings. She was forced to chose loyaltys when it came out that her father was not dustpelt the deputy of shadowclan but crowfrost the deputy of windclan and dustpelts former mate. She died as a young warrior killed by deathberries in a plot against her best friend. She went to starclan and waited for her best friend to join her, but im thinking about turning her slighty evil in death, out of rage and jealousy as she watches her clanmates grow old.
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Virgo sounds like a very interesting character! I would like to hear a lot more backstory, but she isn't a Mary Sue from what I've seen. Room for improvement, but good for now.
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