Love is true for you part 1 | Comments

I have a few notes. Try to be more descriptive, don't rush, and please have proper spelling, grammar, and punctuation. That includes putting in capitals when needed. I'm kind of obsessive about that kind of thing but you've got a lot of raw talent.

i agree with ashbieber123 and LipsForKissing! grammar is a necessity, or else it makes it seem like you dont care and arent trying to put much effort into it. maybe thats not true- its just constructive critism. but you've got talent! just remember not to rush, this 1st episode seemed to go by a little too fast. and please try my love series, I Just Need You Here. you'll love it :)

I agree! And describe your characters and setting in more detail

Not bad just add more detail and use better grammar.

Pshh, This Story iS Perfect! Don't Change Anything, iT Was PERFECT!! Andd' i Don't Give A F--- How Many Tests You Have, You BETTER Make Part Twoo! Make iT ASAP, Pleaseee!? i Love Shane Thoee'

Guys!!! Dont be mean, it wasnt perfect, but i hate perfect people. I love it pwease make part two!

Hey wat your real name
i love this soooooooooo oo good
dont change or

GIVE ME ALL YOUR MONEY OR I'LL BREAK YOUR FACE OH OH

MY way of saying it was amazing!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!