I'M BACK ASS-CLOWNS!
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Thread Topic: I'M BACK ASS-CLOWNS!
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*is trying not to cry*
that was wonderful. -
Bet'cha didn't know I wrote like that, did'ja?
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I read the one with the girl who was shooting the kids at school and who killed herself.
that one I seriously thought was a real memory at first 0.o
can I try? Give me something to write about :3 -
hmm... children perspectives are usually pretty easy.
Write a story about a robbery. -
hmm... KK.
The night was silent. So silent I felt as if nothing would or could ever break it. It was nice having everything so peaceful, everything so quiet, but that's when I hear something in the kitchen.
I slowly open my eyes and throw the blankets off of me quickly. My parents are both at work and I'm an only child, there shouldn't be anything coming from the kitchen.
You can hardly hear my footprints as I walk towards the kitchen. My hands are shaking, and my heart is pounding against my chest as if it wishes to run away and let me face this all alone.
I come to the kitchen, slowly turning the corner and i peek inside. The lights are dimmed in the small kitchen, everything is in order it seems and I don't see what could have been in here.
I sigh and roll my eyes at how utterly stupid I was being and I turn around: that's when I see him. Masked face just like any other robber, his blue eyes looking into my own brown ones. In one hand he has a bag; inside I'm guessing is a mesh of stuff from my own home. In his other hand is a gun, which is pointed right at me.
I don't remember much of it, but I remember that I couldn't stop shaking. Everything was cold and I didn't hardly feel any pain as I was being rushed to the hospital. I now realize how lucky I am to even be alive on this day. The scar still reminds me to this very day and now i always sleep with a gun besides my bed, the doors locked, and the will to never let this ever happen again.
blah that was... horrid -
Not bad. I like your take on the story. If I may make a suggestion, if you're going to write from the first person in the present tense, try and make it more like what the character is thinking, instead of a play-by-play of the situation.
But all in all, I enjoyed the read. -
I liked it, but the tense of the words flips around a bit.
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or wait
Am I reading it wrong? -
kk thanks, I do better when I'm writing a long 150,000 book than a short story XD But thanks a lot for the suggestion :3
Rain: the tense of the words? -
WAIT IGNORE THAT POST I GOT WHAT YOU MEAN RAIN.
It's probably me. XD -
I wrote a zombie story with a cliche ending. guess guess guess
I am all confused, though. xP -
I just have no writing ability XD it's kk :P
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May I also share a story?
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It wasn't anything too bad. x3
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Rain: sure :3
Rainy: if I were to take time i guess it would be decent.
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