A supernatural love story part 1 | Comments

I honestly feel like perhaps you could be a little more generous with the descriptions of the guys. It also feels a tiny bit rushed, so could you please slow the story down. This can be done by things like adding details about what happened in class and like during lunch whether there's something going to kick off or not...

I like Emo's don't ask why but is there an emo in your story

awesome! Maybe next "parker" the mean kid do something like mean stuff. Btw u didn't put description of Blake yet.

it was good :) plz make part two xD