actually before I go can someone do me a favor
- Locked due to inactivity on Aug 4, '16 4:32pm
Thread Topic: actually before I go can someone do me a favor
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You wrote 13/16/15 for the date.
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Also, I'm not sure if it's just the way Google displays things, but maybe more paragraph separation? Other than that it seems good.
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I think it would be fine if it said,
"One example would be the backgrounds."
Since the subject is already clearly known, it should be ok. The way it is now is a little too repetitive. -
Concerning what Appayipyip said, perhaps you could break up the first paragraph at the "All of this leads up to our main question:" part.
It should be correct, since that way the first paragraph's subject would be what the people of the Middle Ages were like.
Then the second subject would be "How Did Renaissance...?"
It's up to you though. It's probably fine either way. -
The problem is that huge blob has everything that is required in the first paragraph. I would break it up if it wasn't for the fact that all of those have to be only in the first paragraph. It's a five paragraph essay.
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Ohhh. In that case, I think it's fine how it is. Long paragraphs are not really a problem. As long as it conforms to the rules of constructing a paragraph, which from what I can tell, it does.
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wow you both must be really bored or really involved to still be with me xD
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I have to leave for a bit because lemon smoothie, but will be back in a few minutes probably
and I'm not bored, just exploring Reddit and Tumblr in another tab -
That's fine, I'm just typing this essay up.
good, I really don't want to bore you at whatever time it is over there -
Looking good so far.
haha, I'm watching things on Hulu simultaneously. It's an hour later here, but I'm happy because my parents are sleeping and they don't seem to mind that I'm on here. xD -
1:35 AM
I'll probably go in 30 minutes. -
yaaaay
only three more paragraphs to go and then everyone can go to bed full of Dark's essay on their minds.
I can't do two things at once.:I Well, maybe listen to music. My parents told me to go to bed thirty minutes ago, but I really need to get this done even though it's just the rough draft. I prefer having a decent draft that needs few edits over a lazy draft that will have to be forced into perfection once more. -
woah Appa shouldn't you be going now o.o
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I just have to say the real-time typing is awesome. I've never even seen it until now.
You are almost done, looks like. 4th paragraph already. -
This part
"In Everyman, Everyman focuses on what..."
Did you mean to do that? Or did you mean to put "In Everyman, the author..."
For the start of the third and fourth paragraphs, it seems that "The second/third idea is that.." would sound better, more understandable.
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