I need more advice. This time for homework.
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Thread Topic: I need more advice. This time for homework.
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They slept everywhere. They were peaceful, but dead. They screamed at me to avenge them. I took a knife to the people who upset them; then I was placed in a pure and soft room. I was given a pill every day; I felt nothing at all; just a bliss.
;-; please give me some advice if you have any. This is due tomorrow. -
What's the character that's feeling like that?
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I like it. Alot. Meaningful in such a short space.
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Could you explain that please? (Sorry I'm really tired)
Thank you. Is there anything that you think I could change? I can't add more because that's exactly 50 words though. -
You said you needed a plot, yes? And a character? What character is feeling that? What's the plot?
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That you could change? Not really. Well, you could change 'They' to 'She', but honestly that's just because I'm not sure if your teacher's gonna be a b---- and count off for non-clarification. But me? I really like it.
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I like it
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Well, the charicters doesn't have to have a name, but the charicter is the narrator/crazy person. The plot is the person sees dead people all over the place, they go crazy, they kill people, and then end up in a mental hospital. I was just wondering if this made any sense at all.
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Lp.
Joker and phenoix: thank you -
I followed the story perfectly, then. Awesome-sauce.
10/10 Kim Kardashians. -
Joker: xD ha. I baced it off of a short story that I wrote... We're doing a horror unit in English.
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It makes sense.
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Okay good, thanks you guys
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