Big Girls Dont Cry Part #5 | Comments

It needs to have things like maybe Charles is in her class or something because if you keep up with just writing she woke up and then at the end of the story you put she fell asleep ^no ones goin to read them anymore but good

Again, this is slowly getting better but you need to make it more longer. (like more than one question box filled out).

It's a Great story just make it longer then it will be better at least make 3 paragraphs in the story

Your getting better at writing you should try two large paragraphs next time.