Guys I need help with my poem.
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Thread Topic: Guys I need help with my poem.
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Let us be more like Satan
In everything we do;
Let's live a life of death
A life that's fresh and new
Let's relinquish wordly things
and not be slaves to god
let's fill our hearts with rage,
Heartlesness and hate
Yes, let's be more like Satan
And stop being slaves to god
The true lord has risen
To save us from God's grasp
Burn the bible, free the sinners
Kill the Christians, trap the angels
The true lord has risen
To corrupt our souls and kill us all
More than ever, they need the Christ
Without him they have lost all hope
Heaven now closed, hell still open
God has abandoned us and the true lord has risen -
i hate poems.
so im of no use.
sorry not sorry. -
Nice one.
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meh. .-.
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isnt this supposed to be in the library
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d_h It is but I don't really care about what you tell me.
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Dude that poem is horrible! Meaning the content. It's written well.
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Except you did miss a couple capitalizaions at the beginnings of lines, and periods at the ends of sentences.
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Hiccstrid I missed them because I was lazy typing that up from paper.
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Poe,so aren't dependent on perfect punctuation, you punctuate according to how you want the poem to flow.
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I was just a lazy typing it up bruh
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The only thing I would change is the rhyming bit. In the first section, you rhymed "do" with "new", but that was the only thing that rhymed. So I would either make it so the second and fourth line of every section rhymed, or that the second and fourth line of the first section didn't rhyme.
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Doa that is true but I didn't really realise it. I wrote it today in around 20 mins.
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