Well I want feedback on my songs toooooooo.
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Thread Topic: Well I want feedback on my songs toooooooo.
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I can't take back anything I've said so
Please don't take anything too personally
I've held my ground for far too long
My heart's starting to grow out
So cold
So frightening
My head won't let me think straight
The world is going to stop soon and I
I can't be the one stuck with it
(Help me)
[Chorus]
I can't live on like this
Oh
I can't take any of this crap anymore
My heart is burning for someone
Yet
I can't help but feel alone
Save me
Save me
Save me!
Why do I feel like my heart's a shadow
Of my old self
Versus this new one?
Wake me
Wake me up from this nightmare
Make me
Make me feel like this is all still fair
Holding on to a thread
It's sure to break, oh I'm sure of that
What will become of me
Is my worst enemy
Cold, lost, and afraid
I need courage, hope, something to help me out
If I can't take back what I've said
Please know I didn't mean it
[Chorus]
I can't live on like this
Oh
I can't take any of this crap anymore
My heart is burning for someone
Yet
I can't help but feel alone
Save me
Save me
Save me!
Why do I feel like my heart's a shadow
Of my old self
Versus this new one?
Nightmares slowly take over
I'm being sentenced to a punishment worse that death
I'm sorry I've sinned so much
Sorry I've sinned for so long
Please don't hold it against me,
I'm
Lost-Alone-Terrified-Hurt
Dying-Screaming-Choking
Losing a big part of my heart
Oh
Can't you take my apology,
Can't you help me right my wrong
I'm sorry it doesn't work,
I'm sorry life still hurts
I'm
Screaming-crying-losing all I have
Can't you take my life,
Can't you take my life,
Can't you rid me of the pain I've gone through so long?
OH
[Chorus]
I can't live on like this
Oh
I can't take any of this crap anymore
My heart is burning for someone
Yet
I can't help but feel alone
Save me
Save me
Save me!
Why do I feel like my heart's a shadow
Of my old self
Versus this new one?
Why am I dying?
(Why am I dying)
Why am I crying?
(Why am I crying)
Why am I still breathing
I asked to to rid of me
Why am I speaking?
(Why am I speaking)
Why am I feeling?
(Why am I feeling)
Why couldn't you do a simple task?
[Chorus]
I can't live on like this
Oh
I can't take any of this crap anymore
My heart is burning for someone
Yet
I can't help but feel alone
Save me
Save me
Save me!
Why do I feel like my heart's a shadow
Of my old self
Versus this new one? -
I pretty much love all music,but thats an awesome song, considering u made it yourself, im impressed.
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I write all of my songs by myself. That's the only way to make beautiful s---.
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Well, that'a a great one.
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*that's
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BEEMY!!
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Esel Zerstorer NewbieWhat music does it go to?
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Thank you.
Once again, thank you.
None, at the moment. I'm going to have to download a music maker that sounds decent. -
A solid 5.
Songs are suppose to rhyme, it makes the beat go with the lyrics.
Your's seems all over the place. -
Esel Zerstorer NewbieI recommend audacity for audio editing.
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Yeah, seems pretty good. Best of luck with the actual music, though.
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Songs don't have to rhyme.
Yours was all over the place too.
Well thank you.
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I also made these.
Pride's:
Come here my pretty little ball of fluff,
My angel that I love to pluck out of the air
You're my darling
My one hope at this moment
You're so beautiful and I want to shout it out
I'm practically one of the seven sins
I have your pretty face wrapped up in my shadows
Still, you're not scared
I like that side of you
We're caged up together in such a small little world
I'm glad I'm in a cage with you
I know you make mistakes, I have made more
I live in a whole different world no matter how close we are
You're everything to me and I hope you never leave
No matter who I'm stuck with
No matter what I need to do
You're always by my side, my pretty little angel
I'm practically one of the seven sins
I have your pretty face wrapped up in my shadows
Still, you're not scared
I like that side of you
We're caged up together in such a small little world
I'm glad I'm in a cage with you
I suppose it's not your fault that I can't take another step
The world is spinning all in my head
I think I could be classified as crazy if it weren't for you
Or if it weren't for me
I'm the worst of the sins, yet
I feel like I'm the best
Maybe it's my name or maybe it's you
I'm just so happy now you're here
I'm practically one of the seven sins
I have your pretty face wrapped up in my shadows
Still, you're not scared
I like that side of you
We're caged up together in such a small little world
I'm glad I'm in a cage with you
Taylor's:
[Haha, my little kitten]
Baby, you've got me right around your finger
Or is it the other way around?
I like to look at you from the head to the toe
And smile 'cause I know you're mainly mine
You make my heart want to melt
No matter what the time
You're my darling little cat
You're the only thing that makes me bow
We're the King and the Queen,
King and the Queen
Your purrs so mighty, meow so fine
Such a royal cat you are, oh baby
We've got lots of kids running 'round and 'round
Most of the time I'm staying with you
It's funny when you notice that no matter how many times I've gotten you upset
Dear you stay clinging to my arm
I suppose it's not that bad
When I love you to much to care
Oh
You're my darling little cat
You're the only thing that makes me bow
We're the King and the Queen,
King and the Queen
Your purrs so mighty, meow so fine
Such a royal cat you are, oh baby
Hold on tight my little cat
I'm planning on taking to a trip that you will like
Up in the sky
Is it a bird, plane, superman, dog?
Nah, it's just me with my darling little cat
My beautiful fluffy kitten
Oh, soar with me
Be with me
Roar with me
You're my darling little cat
You're the only thing that makes me bow
We're the King and the Queen,
King and the Queen
Your purrs so mighty, meow so fine
Such a royal cat you are, oh baby
Selim's:
Pretty little red head witch
I plan to make you burn in hell
Horrible little liar, you tiny little snitch
You've taunted me past my limits
You're a disgrace to humankind
I just want to rip your insides out
And make you pay for your dumb love
I'm going to cage up your little bird
Torture him until he cries your name in his last breath
You've let him take my rightful name
It's your fault, your blame
There can only be one of us
And dear, I'm planning to be the one on top
I want to be your worst nightmare
I want to see the fear in your eyes
The shadows are mine, not his
You're far from being safe
I prefer to act sweeter than I am
You know I look like a kid but I'm smarter, yet you treat me like one
I'm going to cage up your little bird
Torture him until he cries your name in his last breath
You've let him take my rightful name
It's your fault, your blame
There can only be one of us
And dear, I'm planning to be the one on top
You should drown yourself in water my dear
Of course, you are a cat
Or I can shove you and your love off a cliff, so much fun!
I prefer to see my shadows over his than yours
You're going to die
Hopefully at my hands
Dumb little thing
I'm going to cage up your little bird
Torture him until he cries your name in his last breath
You've let him take my rightful name
It's your fault, your blame
There can only be one of us
And dear, I'm planning to be the one on top
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