YYYYEEEESSSSS!!!!!
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Thread Topic: YYYYEEEESSSSS!!!!!
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Cliff hanger! Love it!
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Thanks guys. Im working on the rest right now. I'll have the rest in about...2 hours.
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Yay!!!
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Wow, that's great! Keep it up. =)
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I can't think of anything.
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Gertrude stared blankly out the window. She's what? Gertrude thought. She had to figure out what was going wrong. Gertrude couldn't just ask Rose,what was she going to ask her? Gertrude paced back and forth in the kitchen thinking. Vampire? No. Werewolf? No. Gertrude thought.
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Gertrude was so stressed,she wanted to scream,but she didn't. She started sweating a little. Gertrude quickly ran to the bathroom and splashed water on her face. "What are you doing?" she heard someone ask. Gertrude look to her side and saw Rose. She wiped the water off her face then stared at Rose. Suddenly,Gertrude had pinned Rose to the ground. "What...are you?!" Gertrude said.
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Rose struggled to get out,but Gertrude had her down on the ground good. But,Rose got out,ran upstairs into her room,and locked the door. Gertrude banged on the door lots of times then gave up. I'll never find out what she is. she thought sadly.
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I wanna know more!!!
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Did you read the first chapter? I'll get the thread up.
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If Rose wouldn't tell Gertrude,then Gertrude would have to find out from Spencer. Gertrude snuck out and walked to Spencer's house.
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Gertrude knocked on Spencer's door. His mom opened it. "Hi Gertrude! How may I help you?" she said. "Hi Mrs.Black,may I come in and see Spencer?" Gertrude asked. Mrs.Black let her in.
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Biance, it's great and all, but I'll give you a tip: Don't use the names too often, like, instead of saying, "Gertrude stared blankly out the window. She's what? Gertrude thought. She had to figure out what was going wrong. Gertrude couldn't just ask Rose,what was she going to ask her?"
Say, "Gertrude stared blankly out the window. She's what? She thought. She had to figure out what was wrong. She couldn't just ask Rose..."
So as you can see, it's much better if you use, he or she or it in your sentences instead of names, hope that helps with your writing. :)
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Thanks for the tip.
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