Being Skylar (part 1) | Comments

I didn't read all of it, but from what I read, it was really good. Please be more descriptive on part two and try to slow down. The best way to pull some one into a story is by making sure they are in the story. Make it feel alive. Use personification, if it helps. I'm not an expert, but it would make it better. Can't wait for part two to come out. Please make it soon =)

(My idea) Brittney comes out and drawls "Well well well! Did Dumpster Queen and her friend get hurt? Too bad... I might help if you weren't such losers!"

Part 2asan (as soon as now)