Who will you love? part two | Comments

The guys seem all the same, you need to make them different with their own personalitites, cause they all seem the same, your paragraphs are short, and i have no idea what the plot is about, and it really needs details, and it's quite boring if every guy keeps on coming telling you he loves you, or complements you, that was just my criticism

Well, it's a good start. You really should use better grammar, spell out "you" instead of "u", you need more detail, and it's no fun if all the guys just keep ranomly coming up to you and telling you they love you. Sorry =/

can't wait for part 3