Ok. My turn for help.
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Thread Topic: Ok. My turn for help.
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I'm planning to write about Hiroshima: The Story Of The First Atom Bomb for fun for my class. It took me a LOT of reading to even think about a first paragraph.....
The USA always boasts about how awesome we are in war, but if you look deep into history, you may find that we did nasty things to win the wars. Have you ever played any war games latley, the ones where they use bombs? Imagine that being real. And bigger than on screen. -
use a different word beside awesome...use something like, great or amazing or victorious...awesome sounds weird
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Zelda fanatic16 NewbieI like it!
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Hm. Okies....
During the World War Two, the USA had been making and testing bombs that could destroy lots of things. -
take out the...just put During World War Two, many instead of lots...
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FIRST SENTENCE REMAKE: The USA always boats about how victorious we have been in war, but if you look deep into history, you may find we did nasty things to win.
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sounds better :)
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