this is related to school. not poems
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Thread Topic: this is related to school. not poems
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Oookay.....
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Or maybe it is related to poems but I really, really need immediate feedback on this. Help please.
Okay, so I incorporated some of your ideas bat, and I came up with a rough draft of new poem.
It probably is not much better though, it needs a lot of work.
Chasing freedom
So far away,
To be rid of this label
Afghani,
To be free to follow
Christianity,
My freedom is nearing
but the distance between,
the past and me
is not far enough stil,
Back were women like me
had lack of rights,
And children were wary
Not any more,
My past is dead,
all that remains
is this line,
between me and my sanity
Freedom. -
Good poem,although I don't get the message its sending.
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Sigh, it is for a school assignmemt. I have to write a poem about a refugee.
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