can someone tell me if this is an ok read
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Thread Topic: can someone tell me if this is an ok read
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Reader x Creepypasta Character(s)
A part of Chapter 1
I'm the type of girl who loves beauty sleep. I love sleeping with a burning passion. To be honest, if I were allowed to say that my favorite hobby is sleeping, then I would definitely admit that it's my favorite hobby. Waking up with messy (h/c) hair while blinking the sleepiness out of my eyes is my favorite way of saying that I'm content. However, I don't enjoy having to deal with my hair on school days. Messy hair and waking up early after studying hard to make sure I'll get a good grade on a test isn't exactly a walk in the ballpark. At least, I happen to think that. Messy hair + alarm clock + school = average day for me.
Beep beep beep beep beep!
I jolted awake to the sound of my alarm clock, my (bright/dull) colored eyes blinking several times in confusion. I was still half asleep, and my brain wouldn't register what the sound was coming from or what it was supposed to be. After a minute of the beeping noise continuing to go off, something in the back of my brain finally registered, and I realized that it was time for me to hitchhike my ass to school. After wiping the drool (Eww!) off of my chin and rolling to the side, I slammed my right hand on the top of the alarm in an attempt to shut it off. Unfortunately, my hand missed the correct button by a few mere millimeters and sent the thing flying off of the stand it had been sitting on. The poor electronic sailed a few feet away and landed on the carpeted floor in perfect condition. Woohoo! Looks like I just got a freebie for being such a sweet girl, eh? I grinned as I stood up and stretched out my poor tired limbs. The alarm clock continued to beep at me as I walked over to it. As my hair fell into my face, I picked the device up and pressed the off button. That thing could be so very persistent if it wanted to be. I moved my hair out of my eyes to glance at the time. The screen read 7:43 A.M. I set it back onto the stand, a low grumble escaping my lips. I had about thirty minutes to get ready and get out the door to be able to make it to my lovely boyfriend's house in time. Last time I was late to his house to walk to school with him, he had threatened to leave me behind with no regrets. He KNEW that I was scared of being alone. What a huge jerk, right? -
It was moderately good, you might need to work on indenting those paragraphs.
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I can't indent on GTQ, sooooo..
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Well, start a new paragraph where it's necessary. You missed a couple parts where the opportunity of a new paragraph can be used.
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.-. Oh really? I can assure you that people have been telling me NOT to do that, and that's why it's a fairly smashed paragraph.
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