A part of a story omg
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Thread Topic: A part of a story omg
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Background of my character T, or Tethiallan.
My name is Tethiallan. It's pronounced tehth-e-allen, for you slow ones.
There are three rules in my way of life. Rule One, it's fight or be killed. There are no second chances. Not for anyone, immortal or not. Once you've f---ed up, you've f---ed up. Rule Two, ignore all authority and do risky s---. If you have to survive, you SURVIVE. And Rule Three.. Leave the weak to die. You don't need them. They're extra weight on your shoulders, a burden. They make you weak. You don't need them.
However, I broke the third rule on accident.. It broke my sorry heart into pieces. It ruined me. See, that's why there are rules. I hadn't realized how important those rules were until it was too late. But we're too far ahead in the story, aren't we? You thought I'd get straight to the point, didn't you? Sucker. Let's go all the way to the beginning, and you'll see why I despise you all.
Tethiallan woke up early into the day, his eyes staring up at the morning sky. He squirmed his way out of the trash heap he had been sleeping under, a yawn escaping his lips. The sun was just barely reflecting off of the rooftops of the houses, the ground still cool and comfortable to walk on. The small boy peered around, making sure no one was in his designated area. Luckily, the alleyway was empty of everyone apart from the rats he had made friends with.
To the left of the heap of trash, there was a wall. The wall was caked with graffiti and cutesy little pictures that other children had painted onto it when paint was still in stock. They were all happy drawings, of little stick girls and boys holding hands and playing with flowers. Tethiallan assumed that the painting was showing children being friends. He didn't quite understand friendship with other humans- everyone in town hated him, and so he had learned that the animals were his only friends. Humans were just toys running on batteries that could easily be replaced by littler humans that took up more batteries than other humans. They were weak, and some deserved to die. That's how he had raised himself.
To the right of his "home" was the entrance into the town. If he went towards the gap, he would see paths to go to different parts of the town- the southern part, the western part, the eastern part, and the northern part. There were five main roads, four for the different areas and one to lead to the heart of the town. He was right on the line of the eastern/western parts (for there were no in-between parts in their town).
The raven haired boy stepped off of the trash bag he had been standing on, his bare feet touching the cool stone ground. A small breeze swept his hair back and forth across his face, causing a small sigh to escape his lips. It was spring time, the perfect month for breezes. However, it was also the time for rains. He'd have to ask around to borrow things to build him and the rats a small den if they wouldn't be able to find anything that would help. He walked from step to step, playing his favorite game of "don't step on the lines" as he went along. The sunlight got brighter and brighter still as he made his way towards the entrance. When he made it to the last part of the walls, he looked up into the sky. It was starting to turn the beautiful blue hue he had come to enjoy. A smile took over his chapped lips. He hoped this day would be special. It was, after all, his tenth birthday. The perfect day to celebrate all alone. -
I suppose there's a reason why I'm ignored. If it isn't smutt, it's not good enough for you all. =w=
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No it's good
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I don't understand it.
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I just saw it and was reading o.o
I think it's very descriptive but not way too much, and that last part killed me. >=[
It wasn't so in depth that it was boring, just enough. The way it was written reminded me of The House of the Scorpian. -
one person says it's good one person doesn't understand it lol very different opinions
What don't you understand? -
YEAH 'CUZ I BUMPED IT
what
wat
What do you mean by just enough? Like, decent descriptive, or almost boring descriptive? -
Well, why don't the humans like him?
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Decent descriptive. xD I wasn't bored at all by it.
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Sorry I was being called cute by a page I worship.
I like it.owo -
Oh. THAT'S SOMETHING THAT WILL BE EXPLAINED SOON but here's the spoiler his parents were mass murders and they killed a lot of people so the town hates him for his family not him himself. Also, he defies the government that they all adore.
:D finally -
aww
yay
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