I wrote a story.
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The waves crashed in, the sand was as hot as a grill, the clear blue ocean was full of hot, stuffy people. Half of the beach were filled with thirsty people, mostly in swimming wear, dropping their stuff and running over to the juice bars. As we look over to the other part of the beach, we will see Allison's family. "Come on guys! We need to get the beach faster so I can find a nice spot to get a nice tan and to see the nice, smoking hot, guys!" Allison's sister, Victoria McCann, was putting on a sun tan bronzer and their mother, Emerald McWaters, the successful fashion designer, gave Victoria a dead glare and Victoria automatically switched her make-a-person-into-bacon sun bronzer with this very cheap, CVS, SPF, sunscreen that always makes us look like a walking snowman at the beach.
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Okay. Just think about indenting. I can't tell if it's supposed to be a paragraph or multiple paragraphs put together. It's something to consider.
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"Okay, girls.. Me and your dad are going over there to go rent out our boat, just stay here and don't do anything bad. Or you will regret doing this on this perfect trip I have planned for the whole family." Mrs. McCann and Mr. McCann walked over to the rent-a-boat place. "I can't believe on how hot is is!" said Victoria. She started taking over her pink and light lime colored shirt that said "Glamorous" on the front and after it showed a electric pink bikini with salmon colored polka-dots , which she clearly got at this high-end store on Rodeo Drive. It was such a shame that Allison couldn't fit into it. Even if they were identical twins, they had different sizes and they had the same eating lifestyle. It was just that Victoria was blessed with high metabolism and so she can show her body any time, any day. Allison was a bit chubby and hated showing her body so much. She still had the good looks, but was usually taunted by most people because of her weight. "Aren't you gonna take your shirt off? I bet it's like an oven under that coat." said Victoria using her now full of sweat and smell, shirt as a fan. "Vic, you already know I don't like showing my body that much. I am not you. I am me." Allison looked away irritated. "Oh, come on! Just this once! I know that you atleast lost 50 pounds last month!" said Victoria. "I said no, and that's final." Allison rolled her eyes and looked the other way. Victoria shrugged and looked at their parents to see if they were looking at the terror twins, they weren't. So she snuck out the bronzer and started slapping her skin with that skin-frying poison.
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"I thought mom told you not to put that on your skin." said Allison looking at her twin. "Oh, well.. she isn't looking. I wanna look tan and fit in with these californians." Her twin looked proud on what she was and Allison just shook her head and let her do her business. Their parents started walking towards them with gleamed faces, as if it was another labor moment. "Girls, we found our boat. Let's start heading there before it gets even more hot. Victoria took her stuff off the now, frying your butt off, sand and hid the bronzer in the botton of her bikini and that is where nobody wants to go to. Allison gave her a dirty look and Vic just smirked and sashayed into the beach crowd, where they would gleam over her slim body, nice hair, and perfect complexion. Emerland rolled her eyes and so did Mr. McCann and also Allison. They all knew that this was going to be the vacation they would never forget.
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*Emerald.
As the McCann family got the waiting dock, they saw their boat, all of them gleaned as the shiny new boat sparkled into their eyes. They stood there in surprise. "Wow, mom. I never knew we could afford... This, I mean.. li-" "Of course we can! We live in LA now! We are full of money!" interrupted her airbag of a sister. "Actually, Vic is sorta correct. I was able to get us here to California and get a 200,000 dollar boat that I am paying every month." Both twins stood in shook as their parents started taking pictures, like the price wasn't bad. "But! But! We couldn't afford this." said Allison. "Girl, don't worry about it. We will explain everything at the end of this vacation. What do you know? This vacation could last forever, but let's just board into this baby and make this vacation worth paying for!" said Emerald nervously. She walked aboard of the big ship fast taking pictures like a paparazzi puppet. Both twins knew that their parents were hiding something and that they would have to figure it out soon.
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