Imma post some of my story in this thread
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Thread Topic: Imma post some of my story in this thread
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Your should
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I could wright you in as someone who we meet along the way, pick good or evil, then a disney song, then make a cherrie, thats if you still wanna be in it.
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thanks but ill wait till its comepletely done
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You can do it chapter by chapter that's what I did
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oh
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Lot of people on there do that
Cliff hangers -
Part 3 is where we meet the big bad, sora, he turns the wheelers into a macanical army that he can use at will but the only way Mura-mura knows about this is beacuse she is spying on the conversation with the kind princess (who set her free and offered to take her in untill she could find a way home) and sora, with her new freind Ryuuzaki:
"Looks like you havent changed mogi" said sora, "neither have you" she said, he looked at her, "so sweet, but, Let's go back to war and violence I'm so bored with peace and SILENCE ! Nights of evil, filled with fear Your worst dream, that's my idea of fun !"he said ripping princess mogis head off causeing the pale men I saw earlyer to cackle. "Let darkness find it's sad ways; Let's go back to good old bad days No more foolish acts of kindness Arthur and his kingdom will be mine !" sora yelled pointing at the window we were stareing in from, "Years from now, no one will bother, To recall your good King Arthur Because all of this will be mine ! This will all be mine !!" and suddenly we bolth went flying through the wall, he caugh me and held me up chokeing me, "ahh the long lost princess" he said with a smug smile, "I have a plan; it includes you You, Mura-mura, will lead me to the castle, Where I will claim all this is mine In the back of your wagons, my men will all hide You'll sit up front as the gates open wide Now watch me create my mechanical army with pride !" the said as an explosion eruptid behind him, it was a giant hole filled with green water, "With this potion I bought from some witches A drop on this chicken; And watch as it switches into a weapon That I can use at will." he pushed one of the men in there and he came out with wheels on his hands and feet and blades on his head. "Now this chicken can kill !" sora said laughing, the men did the same, "like it princess? I call them wheelers!" he looked at the others who were eger to jump in and become his army, "Stand right up and enter quickly; I'll transform the meek and sickly into iron men with hands of steel. Yes, into the water ! Quickly ! Now, go, you fools ! Next stand up straight, now ! Move it along ! Prepare for the dawning of a new age: The Sorian age ! Year One !" the rest of the men jumped in and the same happend to them. "Worshipped, hated, loved, and feared ! I'd just like to say a few words: I, me, mine ! You were mistaken if you believed Sora was someone who'd crumble and leave Now I am back, and I will be staying this time !" he cracked up laughing handing me and Ryuuzaki to some of the men who havent changed inot monsters yet, "I told you once I told you twice ! Everything you see before you Every last bit of it will... be.... mine !!!" he yelled and the wheelers yelled with him, the last two left and just let us go, we quickly ran out the busted hole on the window and got away without anyone noticeing. -
sorry late
i see but i think im just gonna keep it on gtq -
Aw
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Part 4, the two argue over going to the catsle of kings together sepretly or together, Ryuuzaki says its a mans job, but Mura-mura says that women can do it too here we go:
I stood up and looked him in his blue eyes grabbing him by the shirt, "what do you mean ill chip a nail? I have every right to go there as you do! I am the lost princess after all!" i screamed in his face, he laughed. "I know the sound of each rock and stone And I embrace what others fear You are not to roam in this forgotten place Just the likes of me are welcome here" he said walking away, I followed him, "Everything breathes and I know each breath For me it means life For others it's death It's perfectly balanced Perfectly planned More than enough for this man" he jumped on a rock and it started riseing, i grabbed onto the end and held on tight. He just looked down on me and jumped on a tree branch, I did the same, "Like every tree stands on its own Reaching for the sky I stand alone I share my world with no one else All by myself I stand alone!". "I've seen your world with these very eyes" He jumped from the tree right infront of some quicksand witch he avoided, i jumped down when he stoped me, "Don't come any closer, don't even try I've felt all the pain and heard all the lies But in my world there's no compromise" he helped me around it and we stared into eatchothers eyes for a small wile, "Like every tree stands on its own Reaching for the sky I stand alone" he sang pushing me away, i let out a small puff of air, "I share my world with no one else All by myself I stand alone All by myself I stand alone All by myself I stand alone!" and he just keeped walking killing some harmfull plants along the way. "HEY IM STILL COMEING WITH YOU!" I yelled catching up to him, "Oh god i cant belive im saying this but, fine! you can come!" he yelled out. "yay!" i said wraping my arms and legs around him. "on one condition though" he said, "what is it?" i asked, "dont ever do that again!!!!!" -
yah sorry
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Part 5 is about Ryuuzaki and Mura-mura meet there first obsticle, the voodo master himself Dr. Facilier:
We walked a wile more untill we came to a small house, with black smoke comeing out of the chimeny, "Dr. Facilier....." said Ryuuzaki, "who?" I asked, "lets just say the worlds best con artist" he answerd, all of a sudden we heard a voice from behind us, "Don't you disrespect me little man! Don't you derogate or deride! You're in my world now Not your world And I got friends on the other side!" said Dr. Facilier, voices chanted what he said creepily, I hid behind Ryuuzaki. "Sit down at my table" he said pushing us into his house and sat us down "Put your minds at ease If you relax it will enable me to do anything I please! I can read your future I can change it 'round some, too I'll look deep into your heart and soul, Make your wildest dreams come true!" he said, i dident see how he was a con artist, he was probobly gonna give us a fake fortune or something, "I got voodoo I got hoodoo I got things I ain't even tried! And I got friends on the other side." again the voices echoed him. "The cards, the cards, the cards will tell The past, the present, and the future as well! The cards, the cards, just take three Take a little trip into your future with me!" we both picked 3, he chose me first, "now you little lass are from across the sea, your from 2 long lines of royalty, you want this boy" he wispered the last part to me looking at Ryuuzaki who looked bored, "but your hopes are low, you need to see into his heart and soul!" he shouted. Then he went to ryuuzaki, "On you little man, I don't want to waste much time You havent found love all your life You havent loved your mother and your sister and your brother. But when you get married you will shurly love your wife! And in your future the you I see, is exzactly the man you now want to be!" he got up and stood on the table, "shake my hand kids, wont you shake a poor sinners hand? Yes!" he shouted one we shook hands with him. A few voices around the room sang "are you ready?" "Are you ready? Transformation central!" "transformation central" "Reformation central!" "Reformation central!" "Transmogrification central! Can you feel it? You're changin' You're changin' You're changin', all right! I hope you're satisfied But if you ain't Don't blame me!! You can blame my friends on the other side!" "You got what you wanted! But you lost what you had! Hush..." and suddenly the house dissapeared, "CRAP NOTHING HAPPEND AND HE TOOK MY MONEY!" Ryuuzaki yelled, "woah, he did?" "yeah if i ever see him again.... Wait were are you going?" he asked, i was walking away, "come on we have to keep moveing, he sighed and caught up to me and we keeped on walking. -
Part 6: We walked for a couple days and really nothing happend we sleeped ate got a little closer eatch day, "we'll get to the castle soon" Ryuuzaki told me, "arent you forgeting something?" asked sora from behind us, he had his army of wheelers and some other creatures with him, "crap" said Ryuuzaki, he took out his ruby sword and stabbed sora in the heart, he grabbed my hand and we ran, I saw the top of the castle and when some farries tried to go after us sora stoped them saying they would draw attention to themselfs. We ran all the way to the castle and ended up at the front gates, Ryuuzaki looked up at the castle gaurd, "OPEN UP ITS THE PRINCESS! SHES BACK!" he yelled. The gaurd opened the gate and once I stepped in all eyes were on me, the croud parted and a man and woman dressed in fancy clothes ran up to me and hugged me, "my daughter" said the woman crying, "you have come back!" the man shouted, "have you been training to become a knight?" he asked me, I nodded "allways have and now I know why" i answered, the king picked me up. "now tell me what is the name they gave you in that other relm?" he asked, "Mura-mura" "ALL HAIL PRINCESS MURA-MURA" He shouted, the croud repeated after him, I looked to Ryuuzaki who was walking away, my dad let me down and I was about to run to him when the croud surrounded me. He walked away with his head down, "I guess your far better with out me, you dont need a comminer draggin you down, I was stupid to think i could get the girl, I thought i saw love In her eyes..." and he walked out of the castle gates and I felt like I would never see him again.
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ill do part 7 tomarow i havent wrote it yet
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Good story i can't wait for my character to apear
P.M i've seen those 2 films excaliburn (i don't know how to spell it) and the other one which names i forgot
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