The Adventures Of The Confection Girls
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Thread Topic: The Adventures Of The Confection Girls
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So, I wanted to make this super-girly and cutsy series about girls that are related to sweet confections and delectable desserts, and here it is.
Time: 9:45 a.m, morning
Place: Candyland
Setting: Cookie Dough's Bedroom
Cookie' s POV
I can't believe it's the first day of school! I have been waiting for this moment for my entire life! Especially when I get to officially start High School with my friends!
Candyland High! The most perfect school in the entire universe! Or, that's atleast what it said in the commercial when I was watching the newest episode of Dessert Chic, where models from around the globe compete to become the next dessert fashionista.
I wake up to sound of my alarm, ringing repeatedly until I slammed it to shut it up. Of course, my hair was crazy, and I had terrible morning breathe. I COULD NOT, arrive at school like some monster.
I started blasting "What Makes You Delectable" by One Confection, and I shook my booty and hummed to the iconic pop tunes as I sit at my mirror and gaze at myself. Oops! I forgot to tell you! My name is Cookie Dough, or you could just call me Cookie. And no- I cannot cook, just because it says "cook" in my name doesn't mean I can cook, although my grandmother can. I am usually the leader of the Confection Girls, a pure leader and quite bossy- hehe! But, I am very sweet. Although, I attract alot of dogs by my sugary sweet chocolate smell, it's a natural scent that I hate. -
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After a few minutes, I was finally glammed up in my outfit and I vainly posed in front of the mirror, like I was one of the models inDessert Chic. It was a dress, the top was white and it had a chocolate brown belt which was well- MADE OF REAL CHOCOLATE, and the skirt part looked like a chocolate chip cookie, cookie earrings and necklace and bracelet, a cookie purse, and a headband that has a cookie attached to it. I looked pretty, I have to admit. I flipped my hair and did a pose, not into I hit back into reality.
"Cookie! Breakfast is ready!"
That was my grandmother calling me to go to breakfast. I live with my grandmother, and she is THE sweetest woman that has ever been in my life, and sure she is very young to be my grandmother, but she is like my whole family.
I run downstairs, and into the kitchen I see my grandma reading Dessertland Weekly newspaper and eating her breakfast.
In dessertland, there is a tradition that for breakfast you can eat cake, and some drink that is sugary, because we live in DESSERT land.
"Good morning, Grandma!" I gently kiss her on the cheek and I sit down at the table, where my yummy Pumpkin Spice cake with cream cheese frosting and sweet soda was waiting for me.
"Good morning, how was you sleep?" My grandma placed down her newspaper and she smiled with her popular toothy grin. The toothy grin you would see in some magazines, because she works as a cook for the MOST wealthiest people in Dessertland or universe, and unfortunately she cooks for the Bubblegum family, which Mr. Bubblegum was the mayor of the city of Sweet Tooth Beyond, and his snotty daughter Pink Bubblegum is sadly attending Candyland high.
"It was great, not until the stupid alarm interrupted my sleep." I mumbled as I shoved some cake into my mouth.
"That's what it's for, Cookie." Grandma said.
"I know, but still, that thing is rude!" I said I talked through moist cake in mouth.
"Oh. Cookie.." My grandma chuckled alittle and went back to the newspaper. -
I think I've become obese just by reading this.
Well done. -
You welcome. XD
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After I finish the last piece of my delicious cake, I am choke on it as I see the clock.
10:30 a.m
Classes start in 10 minutes and I probably will not make it in time! Especially when the school is 30 minutes away from my town. I should have thought of that before!
"Uh oh! Got to go, Grandma! Bye!" I quickly picked up my empty glass cup and my plate and put it in the sink and rushed out of the door before my grandma could say bye.
It was a nice, sunny day like every day. It never rained or no terrible weather ever disrupted the beauty of the blue skies. The air smelled like fresh cotton candy, and it smelled yummy.
I took a turn, and as I briskly walked I noticed their was the woods, and I suddenly remembered that there was an awesome shortcut there- When me and the Confection Girls almost got attacked by gummy bears, they are like regular bears, but more terrifying. I jay walk across the street and run into the woods. The trees were made of pure chocolate, the flowers were growing into Reeses Peanut Butter Cups, and there were bushes of Twix and Hersheys. I continue to walk on the dirt path- which was just crumbled up oreos- and it seemed like I was Alice floating down into Wonderland, because I've seen some strange things in this woods. A group of birds all line up in a tree, and creepily watch me as I walk by. Gummy snakes hissed at me, and wrapped around the trees, and the other small animals looked at me like it was the biggest mistake of my life of stepping foot into this strange place.
I started seeing the end of the woods, and I happily ran the heck out of there like I saw a finish line in the Olympics. And as I got out, I knew I was in the city of Sweet Tooth Beyond. It was like California, but even better. There were people walking round on the concrete walkpaths, there were busy bakeries and restaurants, heavy traffic, and I could see the Sweet Tooth Beyond sign from far away. I check my phone and the time shows 10:40.
Classes already started! Forget goggling at how beautiful this city looks Cookie! I gotta get going!
I cross the busy street and start heading my way to the school. -
Scourgelover NoviceAre there any more characters other than cookie?
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Dark_Alice Novice*dies of eating the forest*
I love how you put so much time into describing everything, and there's not much to improve on. Although, you might want to tell the reader the names of characters instead of saying the confection girls over and over again. But I really love this, and it reminds me of a story I started writing. Should I put it up here? Maybe after breakfast, because you made me hungry! -
Mint POV
"Where in the gumdrops is this girl?" Me and the other girls were near the lockers, waiting for Cookie to arrive. I snarled in disgust, what person that wants to be a role model to everyone is late?
"Its almost time for classes!" Raspberry cried out dramatically, enough for the students to look at her with weird faces.
Cookie is never late for things, especially Candy Pyschics. I hate that class, and I prefer Crumbculus but it deals behind the science and pyschical ways of candy.
"Oh, chill guys! She will be here in time!" Rainbow, or she likes to be called Sherbet, said as she leaned on the pink lockers.
The crowds of the excited stopped from being loudmouths to whispering and gasps. And we all knew who was walking in the halls, because it sure wasn't Cookie.
"It's Pink!"
"I like her dress, is that Creme Brulee's latest fashion!"
"So, gorgeous!"
The whispers of everyone filled into the halls, girls eyes were full and bright of admiration, guys were gawking at her potential beauty, and more gossip tended to get pass through the student bodies.
It was Pink S. Bubblegum, the most arrogant, selfish, snobby, vain person that only me and the Confection Girls knew. Everybody else seemed to fall for her "sticky" sweet personality, but behind all of that, it's like a wild gummy snake loose ready to find its sugary prey. She seemed way to perfect to be true, and the faces of Raspberry and Sherbet that I could tell they definitely remember her from sweetschool.
"Your princess has arrived!" Pink sashayed through the halls, and flipped her honeysuckle hair that looked silky and shiny. Her skin was as tan as Kim Parfaitdashian's and her slender hourglass body was dressed with the current fashions that other girls seemed to be envious of. Her crew of airheads followed behind her like they were her subjects and she was the mighty queen.
"Let's leave.." For the first time, Raspberry spoke quietly and non-dramatically and me and Sherbet both look at each other in agreement, and we left the scene. -
I am turn of the POV's and do it in a narrator point of view.
The sharp stares targeted Cookie as she finally arrived in Crumbculus.
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