Please read this.
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Thread Topic: Please read this.
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In eighth grade? Probably around 5'3 or 5'4.
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@Alana I made the character 5'4 before and I was just guessing. o.o I later found out I'm 5'4 too. . . I must go now. See you two later today hopefully.
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Alright. Goodbye, Teresa. Good luck!
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Okay, so let's see...
Names: Tanner & Victoria
Ages: Hmm... Let's say 17 & 18
Looks: Tanner- Black hair (kind of shortish medium), brown eyes, pale, tallish height. Victoria- Brown chocolate hair (long), brown eyes, pale, medium height.
Story plot: After chatting over the Internet for 5 years, the couple finally has the chance to meet. Tanner, living in California (he really lives in Illinois xP), Victoria living in Alabama (I really live in Georgia), Victoria chooses to fly to California.
How does it sound? :3 -
Bye Teresa~!
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Sounds good. How are you planning to let it unfold? Are you going to start out with their Internet encounters?
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Either that or when Victoria arrives to California and sees Tanner.
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But you'll have to share how their relationship came to, whether it's through flashback or dreams; don't forget.
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Oh, I see nao ^-^ Lets see, how about they started their relationship on Facebook?
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That works. Maybe they met through one of their mutual friends, maybe a friend who had moved away and met the other?
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This is what I've got so far...
Victoria yawned, another boring day of school had finally ended. She entered her cabin-like house, and ran up the stair to company her laptop. She dumped her things on her Hello Kitty silk blanket, and plopped onto the snow white chair. She powered up the Dell, and logged onto Facebook... Hm. There was a message and a friend request from someone named... Tanner? The preteen looked at the screen confusingly. She didn't know a Tanner... She looked at the message, and it said,
Hi Victoria. I'm Tanner. My cousin in Alabama named Caroline told me about you, and I was wondering if you'd like to be friends. I'm currently living in Los Angeles, California.
The chocolate haired girl's eyes widened. "California?" she whispered, clicking his name. His profile popped up, revealing a teenager with beautiful black hair and grizzly bear brown eyes. Victoria's heart melted.
She accepted his friend request, and messaged him back.
Hello Tanner. I'd love to be friends. Caroline? Oh, she's my best friend! I'm currently living in Montgomery, Alabama.
She smiled, excited to getting to know him. This was going to be a good friendship, she thought to herself.
----------------5 YEARS LATER--------------
Victoria's hands shook in excitement. This was it, she was landing. The plane lurched forward as it landed on the runway, and all of a sudden, the flight was over. The Flight Attendant smiled at Victoria, and led her out to her luggage. Victoria smiled nervously. She grabbed the 2 suitcases and little domo purse, and headed to the gate. She took a deep breath... And opened it. -
I was thinking about Tanner's cousin being friends with Victoria.. As I said.
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It's pretty good. A few grammatical issues... You don't need a comma in front of every 'and'. Also, it should be 'She looked up the screen, confused.' I don't know th exact sentence but you said she looked 'confusingly' which would imply that her looking at the screen would cause others confusion, not her. So far, well done. c: adding some detail might be nice if you were planning to elongate the storyline into a novel.
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Okay, thank you~! And I will nao change that~. Thank yous!
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You're welcome! I'm happy to help. ^^
If I disappear, it's because this blasted iPod is dying and my charger is in the car. ._.
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