Please read this.
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Thread Topic: Please read this.
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Has my writting improved?I just wrote this.
Save You Tonight
The thought of your best friend in a car accident terrifies you.What is there to do?You can't just race down there and expect everything to be alright because it wasn't alright.Your friend is lying on the road in pain,and there is nothing you can do about it.Your ashamed of yourself.You know that this is kind of your fault because you decided to text him.
"This would of never happened if I hadn't decided to text him.It's all my fault.I have to do something."you sobbed.Pulling out your phone,you called for an ambulance to the location of the accident.
"Hello?I need an ambulance to highway 1-95 in Savannah,Georgia.Thank you very much.Bye.You grabbed your bag and sped all the way to the accident.You looked at the scene in horror and shame.
"He is going to be alright.He is going to be alight.He is going to be alright."assuring yourself.Watching the ambulance arrive brang relief.He was still breathing and had a steady heart beat.Wiping your tears,you knew he would be fine.
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It's actually pretty good. May I just, you know, fix it up, though? Idk. The grammatical errors and all that. And add a couple more details.
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Thank you Madison!If you compare my first chapter to this chapter,you can tell that I have improved.
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People must love my fan fiction.I just joined Quotev less than a month ago,and I already have 35 followers.Last week I had somewhere around 15.I also have four heart and seventy seven reads by 15 readers.I feel so awesome. :D
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*four hearts
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My friend just came by and gave me a rose.I'm feel so special.The feels. OuO
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It came with a little teddy bear!
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My rose.
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XD
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That was nice of them.
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May I just say a couple of things?
Well, I'll just say 'em. Put a space after every period- That's a part of punctuation. I'd also like to show you a few examples on grammar.
You're
Example: It seemed as if he was following you until you checked back and saw he turned another Street. Still, you're scared, thinking of the possibility that he was working with someone.
Think of it as this:
"You are" is the same as "you're", just shortened. It isn't the same as your. Your is like you owning something or you doing an action.
Example of your: Your teddy bear sat on the couch, his head tilted slightly.
Example of you're: You're sure David took the last popsicle from the freezer. -
I understand.
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