Blood Shed
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Thread Topic: Blood Shed
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They ran as soon as we heard the alarm go off. They left me alone in that warehouse. Alone to be interrogated, Thrown in jail, then later, broken out of jail only to be taken back to that same warehouse to be tortured. I have only forgiven my boyfriend. The others, Will get what's coming to them, through my blood revenge.
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...Creepy. .__.
Sounds more like a generic horror film, to be honst. But we'll see how you play with it. -
thanks.
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I think the plot sounds nice and gives a lot of room to work with things. Is this a plot summary or a piece of the book you're writing? If it's a piece you're putting in there, I think it gives too much away and doesn't give enough background on what has happened. If it's just a summary for us to see what you're writing, well then that's why I guess lol.
The first sentence is very powerful. It would be wonderful if used to open the story. The second sentence is pretty strong as well. -
thank you and it is pretty much just a summary of the book.
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Have you ever thought of going into the business?
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It's quite good. I can see snippets of good writing techniques and effects. Keep it up!
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thank you for all of the feedback! i love it. :)
nix: which industry? -
googlenotworking Newbiethats really good babe, cant wait to read the entire book :)
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Well if i finish it and get it published everyone can read it.
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7austin7 Newbieim sorry
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I love the idea! I'll sure read it, so let me know when it's written.
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