Paiges poems
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Thread Topic: Paiges poems
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Feel free to critique on my drafted ones. Completed one's have already been approved by my English teacher and shouldn't have any problems. Comments welcome
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Draft: Grandfather's House
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Draft: Canvas
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Draft: Sloth
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Draft: My Sun
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Completed: Dandelion
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Draft: Mephitic Friend(Sestina)
I gotta write it here because its too long to screenshot)
"Mephitic Friend"
You make fun of me because I'm so fat
I guess I must work on my image.
I have to take a good look at myself.
I'm sorry I'm this flawed.
It's just that you're so remarkable.
But I am so inferior
This is why I'm so inferior.
Why am I so fat?
I am nowhere near remarkable.
How did I not see it in my image?
I am so unbelievably flawed.
I despise myself.
I'm starting to live with myself.
I feel I'm not as inferior,
I think I am not so flawed.
I'm no longer fat,
I dieted so you can't say that about my image
I am closer to being remarkable.
I was wrong about being closer to remarkable.
I have to get over myself.
You now tell me worse things about my image.
I really am inferior.
I thought I was only fat.
Why am I so flawed?
Our friendship is what's flawed.
This is not remarkable.
I'm done with you calling me fat.
What I "have" to do is aid myself.
No person should feel inferior.
No friend would ever purposely insult my image.
You need to check your internal image.
Maybe you are the one that's flawed.
I am not inferior.
Your ability to bring me down is remarkable.
I am now confident in myself.
I am not fat.
It's been a couple months, I am proud of my image.
I am doing absolutely remarkable.
I am okay with the fact that I am sometimes flawed.
I believe in myself.
I will never allow anyone the ability to make me feel inferior.
I can't believe I used to think average weight was fat. -
I have fixed some grammatical errors and fixed the last part of the sestina.
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Four poems I thought were Haikus but after digging I saw that they weren't Haikus so four poems about the seasons.
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Tricube Poem I wrote:
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Two forms of hay(na)kus I wrote
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Multiple Hay(na)ku
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Triolet
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Magic 9
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Those all are drafts btw
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