May I have some help?
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Thread Topic: May I have some help?
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I have to write an essay and I've finished the last paragraph, but it would be nice to have another opinion on it and something I could fix. I haven't wrote an essay in three months so I know it's pretty s---ty.
At least once in their lives, people have lost something in a competition, mainly sports. Many people, especially young children and teens, receive participation trophies for taking part in such competitive things, but are these trophies really a good idea? Though many people might see the pros for giving participation trophies to their children, there are also many cons, which outweigh the pros.
First, participation trophies show children that they can be awarded for anything, even if they dont win. The reason why this is such a problem is because if children are awarded for losing, as harsh as that sounds, theyre being taught that they dont have to try hard and will still get awarded for mediocre, or average work. Whats the point of the children working hard if theyll get awarded no matter what? If the children were only awarded when they did outstanding work, this would push them to become outstanding people. But now that theyre being awarded for everything they do, they might find that they dont have to work hard anymore, and just become lazy, or let the team work hard while they kick back, knowing that theyll get something no matter what. Clearly, we cant have children believing that theyll get awarded no matter what, especially so they dont start having other children take their share of the teamwork.
Next, children might learn the wrong way from these trophies. As children are getting awarded no matter what, like mentioned before, they might learn to kick back and let the rest of the team handle what theyre supposed to be doing. There is a strong chance children will use this in real world situations. If they kick back in a game of pee wee soccer or football, whats to say they wont kick back when theyre older and doing group projects, knowing that the rest of their group will do their work for them? Whos to say they wont throw a fit at the teacher when they get a bad grade, because they thought if they were to kick back they would get awarded no matter what, just like they did when they were younger? By giving kids these trophies, were teaching them they can get anything instead of teaching them they have to work for a living. Hard working kids are not born, they are disciplined. Obviously, we need to teach kids they have to work hard for their goals, not hold their hands and give them everything and expect them to suddenly know what to do when theyre older.
Lastly, people might say that participation trophies are a way to reward kids for their work in any game or club, and that not giving them something in return might discourage the kids and put themselves down. The idea of a participation trophy has pure intentions, but there are other ways to show appreciation to the children. Taking them out for pizza or ice cream, for example, is a wonderful idea. By doing this, the kids are rewarded, but they dont get the satisfaction of winning if they didnt win. Let the team or person who won have that satisfaction and save the trophies for them. This way, the kids are not ignored for their work, and we are not taking the winning gratification away from the person or team that did win. Definitely, there are more ways to show appreciation towards children than giving them participation trophies.
Even though there are some pros to any and all participation trophies, it is evident that participation trophies are not the best way to reward children for their work in things such as sports.
I'm mainly not too sure about the last paragraph, since it is only one sentence long, but I'm not sure what else to put there. If someone could quickly read through this and give ideas on how to make it better, I would be extremely happy. Thank you. -
Please?
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I edited the last paragraph a bit:
As shown above, participation trophies arent the best idea because they teach children they may be awarded for mediocre work, they are not being taught good life lessons because of these trophies, and there are other ways to show that appreciation than by giving them these trophies. Even though there are some pros to any and all participation trophies, it is evident that participation trophies are not the best way to reward children for their work in things such as sports. -
never mind
I'm just going to leave it as it is and ask someone to proof it on monday
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