Feedback?
- Locked due to inactivity on Aug 4, '16 4:28pm
Thread Topic: Feedback?
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I have no idea what's happening, but it seems like, with further elaboration, it'd be really interesting.
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.s. She was sent into a game she didn't want to play. That's all that happened. And when she entered the game, she accidentally caused it to send itself out to other players. That's all thats happened. Was I too confusing? Do I need to fix that?
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Whoa I reread that I sounded kinda like I was snappy. Sorry, I sincerely want to know if there's a way I can fix this.
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It's good, but just a little confusing. (:
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Can someone elaborate on how it is confusing?
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oh okay
No, I thought it hinted at a lot of darker things that weren't explained. I think if they were, it would be really helpful. -
Should it be explained in the beginning, like I edit it, or is it fine later on?
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I think it can be later on. .w. Prologues and whatnot are often cryptic s--- that gets explained later in the story.
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Oh okay good. Then I'm fine.
Honestly the story isn't even about her, it's centered around a player called Margay Knight.x3 -
Legit. I can tell it'll be lovely. >:3
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Thank you.x3 I just hope I can finish a good chunk of it before I lose inspiration and interest.:I
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