Can I please get some feedback on this?
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Thread Topic: Can I please get some feedback on this?
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To close for me
and to open for I need
You are my door
To wake me
And to shake me awake
It's of calmness you remind me
And when all strikes through
You'll be the last of the few
To keep sleeping suns alight
Forgetting everything but me
So disastrous as it may seem
But making peace as we fight
We know one clear thing
We'll remain here tonight
(It's for a class. Is it good enough for war- related?) -
No,It is not related to war!
The poem is a fantastic poem.Really,The words throw it's meaning gradually after we read them.
Well, hi I am gracious. -
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Oh yes, It's beautiful. There's just this one part, "To wake me And to shake me awake". Aren't they the same? Maybe find another way to explain it? But anyway it's great. :) Nice job.
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I love it, and yes, though indirectly, it is related to war.
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Thanks guys, means a lot to me.
@lily yes I guess you're right they are kinda the same? :P
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