I just wrote my first story on Quotev!
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Thread Topic: I just wrote my first story on Quotev!
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Well,you could work on it.You tend to repeat 'you',and didn't start the sentence in an interesting way.
It was just like :
"You decide to get up"
"You stretch and walk over to your closet"
"You sigh and say.." -
I did notice that,and I didn't really know how to fix it.I'm still learning.
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XXAlexXX NewbieI'm gonna make a story thread too.
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Oh,okay.But anyways,it was good.
I also suggest you write like this (EXAMPLE):
Carrie stretched,and rose from her bed.She gently rubbed her eyes,clearing up her vision.Beside her bed,was her nightstand.On it was her glasses.As she reached for her glasses,and cool breeze swept through the room.This caused Carrie to shiver.
I'm not very comfortable with you writing like this:
You:[insert dialogue/action]
Niall:[insert dialogue/action] -
Ok.Thank you.
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Other than that,it was really good for a first. ^-^
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Thank you!
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You're welcome.
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I will write like that example you showed me on my next chapter.
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Ok.I'm looking forward to it.
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I will write chapter 2 when I get home from school tomorrow.When I'm done,I'll post it here.I'm looking forward to it. ^.^
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Hehe,good luck.
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I could go to sleep early so I'll have the energy to wake up early.I'll get dressed really quick and write chapter 2.I'm going to attempt to do that.
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XXAlexXX NewbieGtg. But I'll talk wif you tomorrow
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Ok.Bai bai!
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