Does this sound okay?
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Thread Topic: Does this sound okay?
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"However, I was too excited to sit down for long. As soon as I finished my pancakes, I was ready to run out the door and go meet my boyfriend at his house.
My mother laughed as I stood up and ran to the door. "I didn't know you had to go that early," she said with a smile on her face. "Be safe." I paused, and without another moment to lose, I ran back and give her a quick hug before running out the door.
I shivered as the cold air hit my bare arms. It had never been this cold before, and it was pretty misty outside. It was pretty unusual for it to be this misty and cold, especially at seven in the morning. In fact, I can't even remember the last day it rained. Not only that, but it's the middle of summer. I disregarded the thought as I started to run. I would be late to Jake's house if I was too busy thinking about the weather!"
I'm trying to get to the climax in the story and I just need to know if this sounds rushed. -
well thanks guys
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I NEED TO KNOW IF IT'S BAD
IF IT IS NO ONE WILL READ TO THE PART WHERE SMILE DOG MAULS THE MAIN CHARACTER -
At first I thought it sounded a little rushed but then I realized it probably depends on the length of the story idk
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It's fairly short, so if you say it's rushed it's rushed.
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