Song writting contest
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Okay I'm gonna post one more then pick
Night mare
Once i trapped sny self in side a night mare
You were present you were taunting me
You said hurtful things taht I thought never say
And even though a part of me knew it was all afk e
It hurt all the same
I lost my soul
But then I rembered to think of thoughts peacefull and sweet
It was of nature and you and I together sisters forever
Holding my hand you gently told me
To dream of you when I got scared
Then I awoke in a terrible sweat sitting by a hospital bed
You were lying cold dead but not dead
Your ebony hair reduced to shreds
Why did you try that older i sister mine
Di I mean nothing
To you
I love you dear sister
Please say you love me to
And now I'm sitting at your bed
Hoping and partying to go that you're dead
I'm was losing my mind until I remebered a sad little song you would sing
To chase my nightmares away
It's not just till now I realised the words menat something to
And the meaning behind their true form
But I looked at your silent face
I cried as I smiled at the memory of your grace
You ebony hair once silky and smooth
You vibrant eyes not visible yet
Tenor green ness lost to me
Awake my dear sister and chase away my nightmares
Arise please sister ive lost all hope. -
I'm using this one it's about my eldest sister who tried to comit suicide but is now in a coma the doctors said if she doesn't wkae up by next month she isn't waking up
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So what do you think
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It's really good, I think I might do my other one. It's in third person. and it's about a girl who committed suicide and her mom found her hanging herself, she was already dead, so the mom couldn't do anything about it.
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That sounds terribile my sister Jess ( 2 years younger than teh one in a coma )
Didn't think I was there and she siad to my two older brothers taht she knows when it's april that yin will wake up she loves april
I'm not sure though I talk to her almost everyday in the hospital -
Doctors say that people in a coma are aware of their surroundings, and what is happening. This is it:
Just an average girl,
She always wore a smile
She was cheerful and happy for a short while.
Now she's older, things are getting colder
Life's not what she thought,
she wished someone had told her.
She told you she was down
And you let it slip by
So from then on she kept it on the inside
She told herself she was alright
But she was telling white lies
Can't you tell, look at her dull eyes
Tried to stop herself from crying almost every night
But she knew there was no chance of feeling alright
Summer came by, all she wore was long sleeves
'Cause those cuts on her wrist were bleeding through you see
She knew she was depressed, didn't want to admit it
Didn't think she fit in, everyone seemed to miss it
She carried on like a soldier with a battle wound,
Bleeding out from every cut her body consumed
She had no friends at school, all alone she sat
And if someone were to notice she would blame the cat
But those cuts on her wrist they were no mistake,
But no one cared enough to save her from this self hate
Things were going down never really up,
And here she is now stuck in this stupid rut
She knew exactly what she had to do next,
Just stand on the chair and tie the rope around her neck
She wrote a letter with her hands shaking wild,
"Look at me now are you proud of your precious child?"
But she knew that her parents weren't the ones to blame,
It was the world that should bow down it's head in shame
She stood up on the chair and looked out at the moon,
Just don't think it'll all be over soon
The chair fell down as she took her final breath,
It's all over all gone, now she's greeting death
Her mum walks in, she falls down to the floor,
And now nothing can take back what she just saw
The little girl that she raised is just hanging there,
Her body's pale and her face is violently bare,
She sees the note and unfolds it with care,
All she does is stare, "How can this be fair?"
She starts reading as the tears roll down her face,
"I'm sorry Mum, but this world is just not my place,
I've tried for so long to fix this and fit in,
I've come to realise this world's full of sin,
There's nothing for me here, I'm just a waste of space,
I've got no reason to stay here with this awful race,
It's a disgrace, I was misplaced,
Born in the wrong time and in the wrong place,
It's ok though, 'cause you'll see me soon,
You'll know when your time has come, just look at the moon,
As it shines bright, throughout the night,
And remember everyone's facing their own fights,
But i can't deal with this pain, I'm not a fighter,
You'll make it through the night, just hug your pillow tighter
So let the world know that I died in vain,
Because the world around me is the one to blame,
And I know in a year you'll forget I'm gone,
'Cause I'm not really something to be dwelled on,
That's what they used to tell me, all those kids at school,
So I'm going by the law majority rules,
My presence on this earth is not needed any longer,
And if anything I hope this makes you stronger,
You're the best friend that I ever had,
Such a shame I had to make you so very sad,
Just remember that you meant everything to me,
And to my heart, you're the only one that held the key,
Now it's time to go I'm running out of space to write,
And yes I lost my fight, but please just hold on tight
I'm watching over you from the clouds above,
And sending down the purest and whitest dove,
To watch over you and be my helpful eye,
So this is it world...
Goodbye!" -
Beverlyreagan NoviceToo many choices ----
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Hehe.
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Beverlyreagan Novice:)
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Beverlyreagan NoviceThe contest closes tomorrow people!!! I need more contests :)
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Love the song also when I was at school yin apparently stirred they think she's statung to wake up she's been in a coma for a year now I hope she wakes up
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Beverlyreagan NoviceCloses tomorrow
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Beverlyreagan Novice1 hour and 59 minutes left!!!
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Beverlyreagan NoviceLess then hour goodnight
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Nature NoviceIs it closed?
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