Start of A Revolution

Thread Topic: Start of A Revolution

Magie Magic
Joined: Jul 19, '16
Status: Senior
Matilda saw Yoi being taken and ran over to where Yoi was. Are you Okay? Matilda asked, seeing the men tying her up. Are you guys playing some sort of game? It doesnt look very fun. And we dont have time for games. Serenity is waiting for us! Matilda muttered crossly, cutting the ropes with one of her arrows, ignoring the men.
Yoi Morgan
Joined: Feb 16, '17
Status: Novice
(magie there was four men two went after Matilda and two went after Yoi also Yoi was far away from matilda)
Yoi Morgan
Joined: Feb 16, '17
Status: Novice
Magie Magic
Joined: Jul 19, '16
Status: Senior
(Where does it say that the two guys were after her? And I figured Yoi was around the corner.)

(When the two boys blocked Yoi and Matilda, my plan was that they were trying to rape the girls. Matilda doesnt know what rape is. So I was thinking she wouldnt understand that the boys were dangerous, casually try to walk away, and the boys would grab them and try to have their way with them.

Instead it was a post where the boys were somehow knocked out and Matilda was somehow knocked out and then Yoi decided to hide one of her best friends in garbage. Then suddenly her brother comes out of no where, acting like a three year old trapped in a teens body. So I was thrown off and confused. Then you tried to fix it but still forgot my idea. So I tried to repeat it but apparently you have plans which include details that Im having a hard time finding.

Sorry for lecturing you... Im not meaning to sound criticizing. I find it easier to tell people exactly what I mean in detail so they can understand the problems I see so we can fix them and make it so were both happy.
Yoi Morgan
Joined: Feb 16, '17
Status: Novice
*OK, I get where ur coming from.*

(replace this with the one from before thankgiving*aka about yois brother*

Yoi to protect her friend she hit her in the back on the head hard then placed her insome trash hoping the boys wouldn't find her. "Good luck" she said quitely then heard the foot steps of the boys so she ran. After a few moments she heard the foot steps stop. "Oh no, they might have found her." but, when she turned that corner who knew she would meet up with some other men.

(then my lastest post)
Mused Jade
Joined: Nov 29, '15
Status: Experienced
(Wait, so where does Serenity fit in here?)
Yoi Morgan
Joined: Feb 16, '17
Status: Novice
(She can come in whenever you feel like it, the girls were not far from base it toke them about 15 minutes to walk a mile then so after they where close to yois brother's grave they met up with the two boys. So really Serenity heard the yell so if she runs she could make it there before anything bad happens)
Mused Jade
Joined: Nov 29, '15
Status: Experienced
Serenity jerked to attention as she heard a shriek that pierced her ears and made her heart rate quicken. "Yoi!!!" she yelled again, sprinting toward where she thought she heard the scream coming from.

Two Years Ago

Serenity ran as fast as she could toward the screams that were filling her ears. She shook her head as she tried to push them away from her. She knew thstnsje would get there in time. She just had to. If she didn't, she could no longer call herself leader of this "rebellion". Her legs moved up and down as she came to a dark alley way.

"Adam!!!!!" she cried. She heard no more screams, but she couldn't give up this easily. "ADAM!!!!" she yelled again, this time with more force as passion, as a tear fell from her eye. She made her way down the narrow alley way with confidence and precision. She quickly wiped the tear away and arrived at the end of the alley way, and a gruesome sight lay before her. The governments 'spies' had dismembered his arm and cast it off to the side. They slit his throat and put a sign in front of him that said, 'A warning to all who join the rebellion'.


This memory jolted Serenity back into action and she arrived where Yoi and the others were. "What's the meaning of this??"she aasked the gentlemen that had Yoi.
Yoi Morgan
Joined: Feb 16, '17
Status: Novice
Magie Magic
Joined: Jul 19, '16
Status: Senior
(So now the boys try to have their way with Matilda?)
Yoi Morgan
Joined: Feb 16, '17
Status: Novice
(IDK its your character)